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Fall

Falling down, spiraling toward the Earth.
Always falling, forever drifting.
Leaves are changing colors, from green to orange.
Leaves are falling, forever falling.

Fall.

A blanketed floor of leaves,
Is now the earthy floor.
Hidden beneath, secrets of Spring.
Waiting to be revealed after winter storm.

Fall, is a mistress,
With a gown made from fallen leaves.
A crown of twigs is rested upon her head,
With a single flower in the middle.

Etched in her beautiful face, are
Dimples that indicate everlasting joy.
Pink cheeks chilled from a sudden cold
That always begins before winter.

A flowing river of orange hair,
Shining dimly in the shaded forest,
Is her most prized possesion,
Bragging about it all the time.

Yet Fall is selfish and greedy,
Always wanting what everyone else has,
Whether it's a diamond necklas, or an acorn,
She wants it all, and nothing less.

And so she was punnished.
She has been banished to make Autumn last forever.
She has to now sleep from December to September,
Untill Autumn comes, claiming the leaves of the trees.

Author notes

Fall, Autumn. Same thing.

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  • etoile
    November 17, 2008

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    the contest asked for under 60 words, and since this is way over you can't win, but i'll comment anyways.

    i really liked your imagery and metaphor. it was well written. good take on the prompt as well.
    the second stanza is my favourite.

  • deepfeelings
    November 11, 2008
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    really good

    this is amazing your really talented