Kill me now as I lay here weak.
I have been fighting for a lifetime now.
I did my best and tried to save you,
but your problems are to much for me.
Only you can save your self.
I tried to help you,
I wasted my energy on you.
So kill me now as I lay here weak.
I've been fighting for you,
I give up.
Author notes
Special thanks to http://th06.deviantart.com/fs20/300W/i/2007/284/e/1/Solitude_by_angelandluci.jpg
A contest entry
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Judge here.
I'm really sad right now & reading this poem probably isnt going to help me but I don't care. I enjoyed reading it anyway. It's exactly what I asked for, for my contest. So depressing and emotional. I can really feel your pain flowing through. Stunning piece !!
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this had so much emotion and power, its outstanding. i defintaly know how you feel. great write and thank you for entering! :]
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This is such a powerful
and emotional piece
I really like this poem and great job
Great use of words by the way
HeartOfFlames..
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I love it.
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Powerful emotions
Thank you so much for
entering my contest
~Pastel
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great use of the prompt. The pic is great, too bad you couldn't use it so we could all see it. As to the read it is short but very telling and I feel out of breath as she seems to be. thank you for entering
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Only you can save your self.
I tried to help you,
I wasted my energy on you.
wow such great lines such great poetry this has given me inspiration
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thats how i feel alot of the time, great write keep it up
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Aw, so sad. But a very nice take on the prompt. You write is filled with sadness and beauty, and that is what I love about it. Thank you for entering and good luck
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sad write,
well penned
Best of luck in the contest
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I can relate to this, it makes me think back to the pain I felt after trying so hard to save someone, and that horrible feeling of failure. Very great work, I really enjoyed reading this.
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strong ending, thats how life goes, and you put it well in this work, great job
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