she blotted smoke smudges into corners--
crimson ribbons knotted pretty
around a gift selfishly given
arched into skyline, she cried;
dust detailing eraser marks
as murmurs scarred lips
& were seen no more
sing your true heartbeat, darling dear;
storm clouds linger behind your eyes,
anxious to sketch petals--
regret's colour in your hands
erosion of singularity
Author notes
A contest entry
- *Ahem* In the mood for a quickie? Come in and join the fun! ^_^ by chilali.
800 points, ended November 13, 2008, 19 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Congrats on the trophy first of all, congrats on a moving write second of all, enjoyed the read
lol
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Wow, all of your stuff is so simple, and sharp at the same time.
It's so beautiful and gives me such fantastic images.
Jealous, here. -
Gorgeous.
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I loved every word of this.
The imagery in this was breathtaking.
anxious to sketch petals--
regret's colour in your hands
Thosse would be my favorite lines
wonderful write
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"Regrets color in your hands" I love that line. Great take on the prompt. My oh my! This is contest is just getting harder and harder to judge.. Hehe. Thank you so very much for entering. I loved this. Good luck
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storm clouds linger behind your eyes
^^in love with that line.
I wish id thought of it myself XD
the only things are the lines:
as murmurm scarred lips
& were seen no more
im kinda confised on the meaning
but maybe its ment to be like that.
anywho. I love the length. great poem
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anxious to sketch petals--
regret's colour in your hands
Love those lines
Great take on the prompt
best of luck
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ooo i like what you did with the prompt, it is beautiful without being over the top and cliche, fantastic piece, i loved it, best of luck in the contest
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It really fits the picture. Realy discriptive.
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