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The Waiting

 

Her patience was infinite

and love filled her heart

So long she had waited

only in death did she part

 

Too weak to continue

she succumbed to the strain

Yet her essence still waits

where her body had lain

 

If she'd go into the light

she would find him there

Waiting just as she had

alone and unaware

 

How sad and tragic

to think what might have been

Had they'd said what they wanted

if they'd only known then 

  

We just never know

when we'll be taken away

So embrace those we love

say 'I care' everyday 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

97 words

Option 2
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  • chilali
    November 13, 2008

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    Very beautiful. I love the rhymes. I have a poem with the same title Hehe. Thank you for entering and good luck


  • Canadamomma
    November 11, 2008
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    the rhyme flows really well; wonderful take on the prompt
    good luck in the contest


  • Grey Mouser
    November 11, 2008

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    When patience is rewarded with the tenderness of love, all the time spent alone is forgotten. Wonderfully written my friend, best to you.

    Mouser


  • Puppydog gold member
    November 11, 2008

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    BEAUTIFUL!!!!

    Your words are so true! One never knows just when their time will come, one must live each day like it is the last they shall live, be kind and thoughtful to others, and simply love.'s

  • Rmh4933
    November 11, 2008

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    outstanding

    hauntingly beautifully, writtenand portrayed in such a fine manner,profound,dark, sad and tragic tale of life so real


  • mooniemc
    November 11, 2008
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    Especially meaningful to me after losing my mother.
    Also love your background!
    Moon


  • troyias
    November 11, 2008

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    BEAUTIFUL

    lovely picture and the depth and feeling that you have put into this write do it justice. Well written witg a depth that is wonderful. Words were well chose and used effectively.

    great job

    *Go with God* my friend

    Valerie


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    November 11, 2008

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    So eloquently written and so true. We don't know when someone will be taken from us.

    The way I'm reading this "succumb" should be "succumbed".


  • lovesky
    November 11, 2008

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    Beautiful

    Full of passion said from the heart and sending out a really important message to all who read it ! I think this is a really great way of reminding everyone how precious life is !

    Much Love xxx


  • Kristine86
    November 11, 2008

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    so true! good poem, and it goes well with the picture. it's sad how often these sort of circumstances actually happen in life, we must always remember to tell the ones we love how much we care. Good write! Good luck in the contest!

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