I am locked in a glass box
I can see you but I am so very faint
Where is my voice?
My hands encircle my throat
You see me when I am smiling
When my teeth are blanched white
Laughter flooding out of me
I am down here immersed in my write
You upstairs watching the tube
And where did our love go?
That red hot thing we tossed
Back and forth, that set our
Insides ablaze and seized
The vision of our future
We were invincible
You brought a permanent
Grin to my whole being
Sunlight shone from my eyes
When you were there
And when I arrived...oh yes
When I arrived, your smile
Spread as if I were all you desired
And the world belonged to you
That was me
I was your world
Where are you now?
Your eyes are dim
I feel your disappointment
Disappointed in me, you are
And rightly so, my love, my life
I am lost, I have lost my way
Re discern my path for me
But you stare at me with solemn eyes
And tell me, no solutions are to be made
I am stuck, left behind
So I immerse myself in poetry
I hide behind these languid lies
The lies that make me eternal
Make me secret and mysteriously
Lovely, the way I used to be
Mirrored in your eyes.
I wait in my glass box
Staring out of my dark realm
You look upon me with your dimness
My cold skin waits for the warmth
Of your smile.
A contest entry
- Big Emotion... by Walking Oxymoron.
550 points, ended November 22, 2008, 23 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Always love your interpretations and your thoughts.
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Oh! There were so many lines from this I liked, so many!
The emotion of feeling lost, and unloved, yet found and loved. The idea of being close to someone so far away...
Love the imagery as well, and I think my fave stanza is the one that starts 'And when I arrived...'
Big emotion indeed, Oh yes.
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Thank you Victoria for the silver! I am honored!
Thank you for the wonderful contest you are so very creative with what you ask of us
Much love!
Kelly
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"where did our love go?
That red hot thing we tossed
Back and forth, that set our
Insides ablaze and seized
The vision of our future" - this is my favorite part. love the imagery of it.
the metaphor of the glass box is neat. it easily captures the feeling of being present but not having your voice heard.
i also really like -"You look upon me with your dimness" - because i immediately know the type of look you are talking about but the wording you chose to conjure the image feels fresh and unusual.
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That is some wicked imagery...I could see it all...it made me angry at whoever was hurting you or "I"
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Thank you for the read! I appreciate your comments
Blue~
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wow this is so sad, cried when i read it, the pain just seeps off the page, and tugs at your heart, you definatly captured the idea of big emotion, best of luck in the contest
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Thank you for reading
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Just stunning
This is awesome stuff, Kel. You really poured yourself into this write, I can tell...super job, deserving
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Thank you Mr. Vito, always appreciate your praise!
K~
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Another amazing write, you are an extremely talented individual
This is another great poem, filled with emotion and power, it is filled woth sadness that is so pognantly conveyed.
In a pure poetry sense this is a pleasure to read, though the sadness is very strong. I do hope this isn't a real illustration of your own feelings, as you deserve to be a lot happier
great write, keep blessing this site with your wonderful works
Rob
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