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Let's

Let’s camp down where the river flows bright.
under the sheen of a full moon, white,
make shadow figures by camp fire light,
see what imaginings they may ignite.

View in the feathers of smoke drifting there,
something enchanting, something as rare,
as fairy tails spun in deep evening’s air,
something our hearts could capture  and share.

The sparks fly away leaving traces of trails,
patterns for brief seconds in midnight veils,
composed where the star spattered canvas entails,
a legend till morning breaks pale,

w
ashes the whimsy from out of our hearts,
dying away as the spirit departs,
loses itself as a new day starts,
In dawn, when that magic departs.
In dawn, when that magic departs


Kiss


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  • stavykm gold member
    November 25, 2008

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    Lovely

    Oh this was full of beautiful imagery and rhyme. I absolutely enjoyed this enchanting poem. What a wonderful poet you are.

    as fairy tales in deep evenings air,
    something our heart could capture and share

    Oh Ioved that part. Thank you for sharing your gift to write poetry with me.

    Many Blessings
    Kelle Marie

    ps Thank you for commenting on my poem..


  • ml12
    November 14, 2008

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    The rhyming was good and my favourite part was "...leaving traces of trails" - that's some good alliteration! The last stanza caught my attention and I really liked it not knowing why. Cheers


  • ennovy silver member
    November 13, 2008

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    Excellent Writing

    Ah a masterpiece of poetic art revealed to us and i adored reading of nature and life. You have a glowing talent so keep writing these beautiful reads....novy


  • Amera gold member
    November 12, 2008

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    Ah! You have mastered the monotetra and this one is filled with wonderful imagery and nature.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Denerica
    November 12, 2008
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    Peaceful

    Your writing just takes me right out there experiencing it! Blessings brother.


  • Summer52
    November 12, 2008

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    Yes, LET's! Very beautiful read. The rhyming is excellent...

    Good luck in the contest.


    summer51


  • Sandygram silver member
    November 12, 2008

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    SO BEAUTIFUL!!!!!!!

    What a wonderful way to start the day with this amazing poem. It sounds so lovely read aloud. The imagery is stunning and the flow and rhyme simply perfect. So soft and sweet and romantic. A delight to read. Take care.

    Sandy


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    November 12, 2008

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    This is really beautiful and yes I have to agree that you have a wonderful way with words. I love reading your rhyme and imagery
    All the best with this
    gaylene


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    November 11, 2008

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    You have a wonderful way with imagery, it creates
    a lovery vision, and always with effortless ryhme.
    ABSOLUTELY GORGEOUS
    God bless you my friend...

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