{stealing} me of my b.r.e.a.t.h
I then start to h/y/p/e/r/v/e/n/t/i/l/a/t/e
Did that shadow just m.o.v.e?
my chest is [tight]
My mouth dry
I cannot s.p.e.a.k
or {scream}
This fear has total CONTROL
in the form of p/a/r/a/n/o/i/a
how do you e s c a p e
your M.I.N.D?
My soul is q i e i g
u v r n
and take more of {this}
save me from
f
a
l
l
i
n
g
please?
Author notes
I cant help but think my freinds are going to leave me when I most need them, and there let me fall, thats my greatest fear, and the worst thing is I know they wouldnt, because no matter how hard it is for me to believe they do care about me
I hope this was okay for your contest
A contest entry
- Big Emotion... by Walking Oxymoron.
550 points, ended November 22, 2008, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Nice
love this poem great not much to say very decriptive and easy to read and catch the meaning of hmmm well i will never let you fall when you need me i will not leave you ok nice peom
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oooooooo.... i iyke this a lot! i can feel the raw emotion in it
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It was great for my contest...
And your fear is parallel to mine.
I love dirty pretty too. I ask only that you revise some spelling... Hyperventilate- Quivering- and Paranoia.
Other then that, excellent job, and I hope your fear doesn't get in the way of your laughter! -
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ah thankyou, I corrected them now
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Good description
of a panic attack. You have an anxiety/panic disorder, no? I do. In know what this feels like. Best of luck in the contest!
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yeah, I was diagnosed with anxiety depression but I'm not sure if thats the same :/
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