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Bittersweet Goodbye

Once, long ago, I held you very near.
You almost were the only thing I loved.
But now I'm bleeding out with fear.
Because it was you, this time, who shoved.

I fall behind, as I fall down.
You slowly walk away from me.
And the puzzle pieces lock in place.
Of who you must surely be.

My mind tries to fight this truth.
That which I refuse to hear.
Because if I accept the words.
It would bring about these tears.

So I cover up the wound in lies.
A bandage I can scarcely see.
But in the end, all this does.
Is save myself from me.

But cracks in myself appear.
I don't notice, but others do.
This hall of pain, walls lined with knives.
That I'm trying to walk through.

Almost endless, this pain endured.
As reality falls, tearing the seams.
The bandage seems to fall from place.
The wound bleeds again, it seems.

With red vision, I finally see.
That I bathed myself in this lie.
But now I see you for who you are.
And share this bittersweet goodbye.

Author notes

Erm, I hope that this was what you were looking for lol.

This is based off of people I've dealt with in the past.

A contest entry

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  • McRae by nature
    November 24, 2008

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    This is just what I wanted. Thank you. Great rhyme, the rhythm falters at times, but that is not a big issue. Thank you for entering.

    Carrie


  • xDemonicxAngelx
    November 13, 2008

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    Gosh I bet hundreds and hundreds of people can relate to this! I thought that it was good but the only part I didn't like was the ending, the whole bittersweet goodbye didn't do anything for me and I found it a tad cliche. Now I know that I sound like a total hypocrite because I do the exact same thing, but I'm trying to change it cause I hate it how everyone I know is writing good poetry and I'm still stuck writing my crappy cliche crappiness. But like I've said before your rhyming is always done so well, but it would be nice to see a change from you. Afterall everything else is bloody changing! Lol. Best of luck in the contest man.

    Take care


  • infectedxheart
    November 12, 2008
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    gorgeous

    your poems make me feel.


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