The night was young
the moon glimpsed
at the darkness surrounding
and winced
at the fear upon the victim in S.Peter'sburg
she stood a mile away from the killer
knew death was near
he watched her from under his hat
at the way she shriveled away
and grinned at the crime
he was to commit without a say
His hand tightened around the blade
which could force its way
easily through her tender throat
and make the beautiful noises
that he loved to hear
as blood drenched his coat
It was done in five seconds
and she lay there with a painful silence
within her blooded tears
that showed all the innocence
and how she had faced all her fears
He walks among one of us now
with a bloody blade under his arms
unseen by our naive eyes
draws us towards death with his charms
I saw his face once
before he devoured me
and now I write this tribute to him in Morse
because he has borrowed my eyes
Author notes
Dani is awesome
"She ricochets and you don't notice"
This is the most darkest,sadistic poem i have eva written !
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Comments
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Very nice. I like the bit about the "beautiful noises". This certainly qualifies as an elegant murder. Well done. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
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This is fuckin AMAZING!!!!!!!! If i could choose any way to die, i would take a walk in her footsteps. That is one sadistic killer.....most of all, i LOVE the method of death....I'd have to say that, for most people, getting their throat slit is a universal fear. Something NO ONE could even contemplate having done to them. People watch movies where someone gets their throat cut, and almost always, there is a cringe, even if the person says they are immune to slasher movies. haha,
nice job and thanks so much for your entry. You've done exactly as i have asked ^_^
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i recognised some spellingm istakes..i shall correct the immediately !
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hahaha
im glad u liked it........
this is the first time i have written something in the"killing" context ....
imm sooo happy u like iittt !!
much lurve and good luck in judging !
Anagha
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