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The Other Side of the Street

I am the town stalker;
voyeur, alley-crawler
and midnight walker.

You do not see me,
but I'm always there
at the edges of your dreams,
a constant nightmare.

You sense me in the dark
as you walk home alone,
foolishly, through the park.

Know that if you stumble
I will pounce on you
and your innocence destroy--
your soul will be my toy.

I am your other self,
the monster in the Id,
a malign demon-elf.

So do not be afraid,
you are the Jekyll to my Hyde.
Let me take you to the pit of Hell--
enjoy the ride.

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  • Immortal Obscurity Greeters member
    December 4, 2008

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    I love your take on the prompt. From the sounds of things, it could be the p-de-v of someone who suffers from schizophrenia or dementia, as the vivid imagery made me think of intense hallucinations. I especially loved this bit:

    "I am your other self,
    the monster in the Id,
    a malign demon-elf."

    You have a stunning vocabulary! Well done & thanks for entering


  • Catie Sheeran gold member
    November 18, 2008

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    "your soul will be my toy" that's pretty dark! I like your take on thi s prompt. and how you wrote from a different perspective rather than the women in the picture..Good luck


  • Ellis gold member
    November 15, 2008
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    Neat write

    You must be from the "Forbidden Planet," a monster from the id.


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    November 15, 2008

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    The trouble with stalking is you always have to go where THEY want to go. If they want to go and see "Mama Mia" ten times, you have to go and see "Mama Mia" ten times. You really have to be very choosy about whom you stalk - my advice is: before you stalk someone, follow them around for a few weeks first.


  • georgie
    November 13, 2008

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    love this one... i used to walk through the park alone at night just to get the feeling this poem gave me... the fear, excitement, thrill of it all
    hugs,
    georgie,
    xxx


  • Snowing Kisses gold member
    November 13, 2008

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    This is a fabulous piece of writing, you employ touchable imagry, and yet it remains satisfying to read, with a nice steady flow,
    Know that if you stumble
    I will pounce on you and your innocence destroy
    your soul will be my toy,
    this verse gives me a shiver down my spine, deliciously dark
    Thanks for sharing
    littlefishone

  • Judith Chandler
    November 11, 2008

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    "Let me take you to the pit of Hell--
    enjoy the ride."

    Great stuff. I think we all have those inner fears. In a way, it can be enjoyable, a thrill. I like the way you obliquely pointed out that sometimes we blame these occurrences on ourselves, eg when we have walked "foolishly" through the park.

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