Gentle touch faded away
Oh my heart crumbles
Only a breath away
Destroyed,and taken from me
But I know that one day, we will meet again
You take me beyond dreams, to see you once more
Empty chamber in my heart....Waiting
Author notes
This is for my Uncle Stevie,with love always xxx
A contest entry
- loosing a loved one by karas.
400 points, ended November 25, 2008, 47 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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VERY NICELY DONE MEW!!!!!
wow, you write far beyond your years,,,keep it up,,peotry is a window to your soul,,, keep writing and never close that window!!
God Bless you MEW
(i can imagine how wonderfully proud your uncle STEVIE is of you, you poet)
Michael -
Oh
This is such a heart felt write I wish you the best
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Excellent write no matter the age, yer mum sent me. As long as you have them in your heart, you will always have them with you.
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sooo sad... you are a great writer, i am favoriting your page so i can come back! wow when i was 8 i couldnt even turn on a computer...
great write, good luck in the contest!
luv,
lovey
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out standing!!
your writting is improving very fast, your use of words reflects this,the last line is full of emotion...empty chamber in my heart..wow the love, the sadness,the ache, the knowing youl see your uncle again has been brought together very well.. this is a very beautifull tribute to your uncle and well done, good luck with this contest
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awsome mate
this is an epic write son, I am proud of you uncle stevie would be too, he'll be watching from heaven, leaning on his stick saying "Nice one cocker" and giving you the thumbs up.
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A very nice tribute to your uncle Stevie. He'll always love you too I'm sure. Keep him in your heart, keep him in your soul always because his love for you will always blossom. Great job my friend.
Brian
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An excellent write. A worthy tribute.
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Yeah, Acrostic!!!!!
Love Them!!
But a sad one.....
The last two lines are lovely, so mournful...
I hope you have the strength to carry on.
Thank You for sharing your pain with us...I hope us reading it really did make you feel better... -
That was sad.
It was nice how you can capture everything in such a short poem.
My favorite part is:
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wow mew this is beautifull so so beautifull im am so proud to call you my little brother so so proud your an amazing writer xx
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Wow, I can really tell that you loved him. Your words are expressed with affection. Best of luck in your contest.
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this is amazing, so much feeling and emotion put here. your are a great writer. bravo
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This is so sad, but also so beautifully written. What a wonderful tribute to your Uncle Stevie. Keep up the great writing! Blessings, Patty
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Oh wow!! This is a so very deep write, my dear friend. It speaks loudly of the pain, longing and emotions and it touches the heart, it certainly touched mine.
Wonderful is all I can say. Best of luck in this contest.
Much love
~Noor
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This is a poignant plea to a loved one. I'm sorry for your loss.
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This is so good!
You are so good at making your poems emotional!!!! You're making me crying now because you are so good. I think you're going to win the competition. Good luck!!!!
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This is really sad I wish much love to you and your family blessings always I hope you have a good day be well
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I have just lost a dear Aunt .. this spoke to my heart ..
with love for Mary and for your Uncle stevie
s
Li b x x
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