I shine out through finger tips
and two-way-mirror eyes
I move with music I compose
from woven babies' sighs
Heart of muscle fires warm smile
that lights up those I love
I feel their giftwrapped presence
brush me soft as feathered dove.
Author notes
Prompted by:
"You don't have a soul. You have a body. You are a soul. "
- C. S. Lewis
A contest entry
- 8 to 10 great lines - Quote Inspired by Kiddy.
600 points, ended December 12, 2008, 21 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please critique the highs and lows! How does this make you feel? Where does this hit you?
Comments
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I don't really like the rhyme... but I don't like rhyme unless it's done like Poe lol.
That being said, I like this a lot. Your imagery is fantastic, especially the line "two-way mirror eyes."
Great piece, it deserved the gold!
(and I kinda can't believe that there are no comments on it, especially since it won.)
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