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A love's never lost...

I looked up at the clouds today,
and wondered if you saw me,
looking down from Heaven,
and remembering how it use to be.

You were there whenever I needed love,
to comfort, support, and care,
but now you are gone from here,
yet I still see you there.

When I turn the corner,
as I walk down the hall,
every memory of us,
I remember them all.

The gold in your eyes,
the feel of your touch,
the ways you showed,
you loved me so much.

It has been but two days
yet I still don't get
that you're really gone
I can't deal with it yet.

I swore that no male,
would I trust or I love,
until I found you,

my great gift from above.


Now you are in a better place,
someday we'll be together again,
I can't wait to see your sweet face,
I miss you so my darling friend.

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  • very, very heartfelt!! overflowing with raw emotion...your pain is obvious and easy to feel. I think you did a great job getting your message across...I'm glad I clicked on this one...peace and light, kp


  • Ice Queen
    May 1
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    This is so sad. It hurts when we lose someone, and I think that when we lose someone that the pain never really goes away that it just stays with us in the back of our minds. Anyways, this is a really amazing write and I love it. Well written and good job!

  • shanana
    April 21
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    I really love it!!! It's really good!!! Keep up the good work!!!

  • Raye
    April 20
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    Excellent!!! I really enjoyed reading your poem...I loved it.


  • XXsorrowsXX
    March 28

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    I love it! its good i dont think you should change it in the least bit


  • StarEyes
    March 18

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    Oh this hits soooooo close to home! It has been two years, and I still feel this way. I can relate more than I would like to admit...

    You are right, "A love's never lost"

    This tugs at the heart, and tugs hard...

  • A good job of expressing yourself.

    I tend to enjoy sad poems most.


  • Aidensin
    February 2
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    I really liked it you did a good job at protraying everything congrats. oh ya nice details to

  • HopelessSerenity
    January 22
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    Wonderful

    It was amazing.


  • ourgirlFriday
    January 22

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    Wow!

    Who would insult this? Beautiful piece! Reminds me of "Princess Bride": "Death does not stop true love; it can only delay it for a little while." You rock my socks! This is an awesome poem, and I'd sure pick it as a winner!!!


  • Forever Eternity
    January 14
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    Really Good

    I really liked this poem and I found it touching to read. I also liked the way you've put the poem in the middle of the page. I know it may be a few months since you've posted this poem, but I really hope that things are alright for you and if you ever need to talk I'll be a friend for you : )


  • Heroesrox
    January 10

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    Awesome job! I really felt the emotion behind this piece! An A+ job! Keep up the awesome work adn thanks so much for the share! I really am looking forward to reading more of your work....which I probably have already............ I read a lot of stuff on here and try to comment on everyones....Sorry for my mindless ramblings.............HAHA!!!!!

    Again.....Thanks so much for the brilliant write and share! Good luck with future writes....but judging from this, you don't really need much luck!!!!!

    ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~~*~*~**~Heroesrox~*~*~*~*~*~*~~*~*~*~*~*


  • Truthful Sinner
    December 12, 2008

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    Great

    Wow
    I can really feel the love in this poem and i really like it because it reminds of personal memories that ment alot to me i really enjoyed reading this poem, keep writing
    Bravo


  • ivans princess.
    December 10, 2008
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    amazing
    awesome
    good
    kind
    so true...
    gost this isnt working but your amazing


  • Cat10
    November 26, 2008
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    wonderfull! I really like it you are such an amazing poet! please, keep writting!


  • RikkiRae silver member
    November 22, 2008

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    Death is not a subject that I will willingly read about for it reminds me too much of what I've lost. In spite of that I found myself being drawn into your poem while having the feeling that I just had to read on.
    The emotions and joy that you had once shared stands out like a beacon on a dark night and I found myself drawn into this poem for I believe I was in fact feeling the emotions that you once felt.
    Your loss, you will never truly recover from, we both understand that, for not only have you lost a part of your soul, but a part of your future and that is one of the most difficult aspects to come to terms with.
    You are lucky to have know such a person, so never let her fade into the mists.

    This is a truly wonderful poem, superbely penned and oh so heart wrenching.

    4th Stanza, 3rd Line: "They" should be "The"
    The word "and" must never follow immediately after a comma


  • a cry of stream
    November 19, 2008
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    i like this so much

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