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Reveal

Who tears into human flesh

inflicting mortal pain?

Who taunts with deceptive lies

tormenting fleshy brain?

 

Lurking in the darkness

as the ego hides from light,

casting its reflection

its shadow blurs true sight.

 

Bring inner self to surface

to see beneath human shell,

beware of pains intrusion;

band aids conceal illusions hell.

 

Step aside, be selfless;

you will clearly see,

ego binds the tortured soul,

creates reality.

 

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  • McRae by nature
    November 24, 2008
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    The meaning was strong. I liked the imagery and the darkness in your words. Thanks

    Carrie


  • Ryno
    November 15, 2008
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    not feeling it
    ~prewrites, come and get them


  • Shantti silver member
    November 13, 2008
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    I really love this. Very discriptive-that ego- Flows well and keeps the reader hooked to the end.


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    November 13, 2008

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    Ah, Kathy, your words
    truly shine the light,
    reflecting your beliefs
    held strong in your sight.

    M-C

  • darrylblacksr
    November 12, 2008
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    Well done!!!!

    Now this is what I am talking about. The truth of life which we all should know and respect. For the light will cancel the darkness, we just have to let it shine... Congrats in the contest and God Bless you and yours...

  • goalsv
    November 12, 2008

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    Great look into the realm of ego! Such discriptive words that brings the thought to life. Wonderfully written.


  • Baahltres
    November 11, 2008
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    So I was going to tell you which part was my favorite... but then I realized I had copied and pasted your entire poem into my comment! lol

    You're really an amazing poet and obviously an amazing person. Your wisdom can help many people.


    Baahltres
    ~.~Yvonne~.~


  • Life is a Beach gold member
    November 11, 2008

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    Very descriptive! Ego is like a wall that keeps people out! "Step aside, be selfless"...I so agree! The ego binds us and blinds us. Pam


  • Rovingone gold member
    November 11, 2008

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    Very tearing. This poem gets deep into the inner conscience.

    beware of pains intrusion;

    band aids conceal illusions hell.

    those are the best descriptive words I've seen in a while.


  • Ziola
    November 11, 2008
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    love it, feeling it


  • who iam
    November 11, 2008

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    Great imagery!
    The Devil comes in many disguises
    concealing his purpose in an attempt to destroy the love we have for our Lord God!
    We need the clarity of Light to carry us through our 'pains'
    Best wishes with this contest.

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