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Autumn Storm

The world froze
Balanced
Between moments

Harmony held
The leaves motionless
Stilled
As the golden daisy
Folded
In farewell to the sun

Heavy sable cloud
Cloaked the sky
Hesitant
The earth paused
Waiting
For the rain

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  • etoile
    November 17, 2008

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    i really liked this! the opening stanza really drew me in and your take on the prompt was great. the imagery was also beautiful. this was wonderfully written. i loved it.

    thanks for entering and goodluck