The scratches of pen on paper
are like band aids,
meant to patch our wounds
but not to heal them.
Without our words we bleed.
Saturated vessels broken
Internally damaged lines
Of hopelessness unrequited despair
Crying within, shouting into emptiness
We find strength and power
Purging our thoughts and hearts
Exposing our every emotion to
Faceless people unaffected
Facing problems of their own
Not burdened or forced to care
Giving over pain to another
Yet hoping that someone hears
In our hearts we realize that
The scratches of pen on paper
are like band aids,
meant to patch our wounds
but not to heal them.
Author notes
Link to Addline Poem... http://allpoetry.com/addline/show/2333175
You will find that the first and last stanza plus line one of Stanza two are incorporated into this piece from the original words of the host “Child of Intellect”. If you feel this is a form of plagiarism not respect for your words and if this is not acceptable to the host please let me know and I will remove. Thank you.
A contest entry
- I have too many Points..... by McRae by nature.
1200 points, ended November 28, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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beautfully written
full of intense emotion
wonderfully expressed
God bless you my friend...
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So sorry it took so long to tespond but I thank you for taking the time to read and for the kindness of your comment. God Bless, Jo-Ann
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I do not have a problem with you using my words, especially since you wrote that they were not your words
I think the piece was really great. I actually liked that you took my words and put your spin on it.
"Faceless people unaffected" really strong lines. I loved the way you repeated the first stanza. You presented the idea( writing for healing), how it makes you feel, what causes it and then the repeat lets the reader know that you know there is not solution. Life just has to keep going as it has and we must just keep writing. Really great.
Thanks,
Carrie
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Thank you so very much for taking the time to comment. I very much enjoyed writing for this contest. God Bless,
Jo-Ann
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