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Watching Lady Jane

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He watched ere she might pass this place, as oft she did indeed,

And huddled ‘gainst the blowing rain that env’ous fate decreed

Should on this day when heart and mind once more o’ercame mistrust,

Obscure the sun and summer sky – it seemed unfair, unjust.

For how could she of noble birth, on such a day as this,

When he awoke with newfound strength and cast-off cowardice,

Encased in carriage curtained off against the mist and gloom,

Now see the one whom fate decreed to be her handsome groom?

The silence hovers, ominous, as folk avoid the road.

The muted words, not heard today, are omened and forebode

The meeting that may not take place, a dream still unfilled,

Our fellow left beside this lane, rain-drenched, alone and chilled.

From way far off he hears the sound, a horse’s labored snort.

Then squishing sound of hooves in mud, her liveried escort.

And then a squeaking sound of wheels, the carriage swings in view.

An inhaled breath stills pounding heart, he knows not what he’ll do.

A smile then fills his whiskered face, his chest thrust out with pride,

And if this scruffy man is groom, someone must be his bride.

The prancing steeds, befouled with mud, approach our erstwhile swain,

Whose soul spills out through glist’ning eyes, with joy he can’t contain.

The carriage swerves, the horses strain, the reinsman cracks his whip.

The scraggly stranger standing by remains unseen this trip.

Besmirched by mud the horses throw, he waves as she sweeps past,

No disappointment in his heart, his hope remains steadfast.

Tis only time he tells himself and curses at the rain,

For if the sun would only shine he knows his Lady Jane

Could see him from her carriage seat and smile and beckon hence;

He’d join her in that cozy place and share her innocence.

Alas till then he’ll wander off to seek sustaining fare,

But when tomorrow dawns at last you’ll find him waiting there.

And there he’ll wait the lady’s coach, much as he’s done before,

Not letting loose nor giving up, he’s faithful o’er and o’er.

Author notes

Nothing too complicated here, just a simple story.

I chose No. 1 "Hope springs eternal in the human breast."

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  • Draig aine gold member
    December 30, 2008
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    well done

    beautifully crafted a joy to read


  • Ellis gold member
    November 19, 2008

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    Excellent writing

    This goes along with your Motto, "Never Give Up."

    It is well beyond my vocabulary to be able to write something like this. I haven't read nearly enough through my life. Television has side tracked me too often.


  • Arrianna MacEwan
    November 16, 2008

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    this is wonderful. it reminds me of some story I would dream up. I love the way it is written. The vocabulary is just the way I like it
    Great write grampa


  • malkinpuss
    November 15, 2008
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    Beautiful

    Written in the style of the old poets of which I am very fond! Well done poet!


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    November 15, 2008

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    Beautifully written. Well done. Congratulation on your trophy. A most worthy winner in deed. ~Pamela


  • CitrineSunrise silver member
    November 15, 2008

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    Beautifully written in a classic style with graceful language and wonderful rhymes. The story was well developed and the language was poetic, yet easy to understand. Thank you for your entry. Peace, Liz


  • suseann
    November 13, 2008

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    A truely magnificent and beautifully worded story poem. I'm absolutely green with envy . This is a wonderful piece.


  • Gatlianne
    November 12, 2008
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    ahahahah "Your orderly and precise mind" Yes, that would be OGP


  • Gatlianne
    November 12, 2008
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    I just love this line: For how could she of noble birth, on such a day as this


  • Ishtar
    November 12, 2008

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    Eternally jealous of your orderly and precise mind.
    I will never grasp the concept of perfect, rhyming, form poetry.

    And so, I'll remain in my medium of mediocrity and write my entropic poetry while being completely jealous of your poetry.

    This was a beautiful write, just like always, Sir.

    - GD Reens.


  • Legend silver member
    November 11, 2008

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    Super Excellent

    There are few who weaves a tale as well as you .I am always assured of something of pleasure when i click on your name
    I love every word of this one A wonderful story
    Good luck in the contest


  • Veronica Leigh
    November 11, 2008
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    beautifulness! I love the horse part. Its perfect


  • dustytiger
    November 11, 2008

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    wow what a beautifully written piece, it's just a story written with beautiful words and simplicity, it's just amazing, i loved it, best of luck in the contest

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