The ding of a bell,
A soft foreign call,
It beacons all softly,
With sweet lullaby.
Another peal,
Golden song,
Brings all who hear,
Alert, alive.
A new call sounds,
A blissful jingle,
Beware the veil,
It blindfolds wielder.
One more ring,
An upbeat tune,
Keep control,
Or tongue will fly.
Fourth bell sings,
Angelic chime,
Listener’s ears,
And lips it does hinder.
Next tone sounds,
This one sly,
It sounds of sin,
For this one binds.
Last note heard,
Sorrowed weeper,
This deep sound,
Brings all much deeper.
When seven songs sound,
Acceptance is key,
Denial and qualms,
Will wrongly compel.
Beware little bells,
With their sweet and coy songs,
For each small sound heard,
Brings all further down.
Author notes
Option 2: Wordbank
A contest entry
- ~Options~ by Dead Hair.
625 points, ended December 16, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - All poets welcomed! by Guerrero.
900 points, ended November 24, 2008, 51 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - CELEBRATING POETRY AND POETS- ONE-DAY competition, "PREVIOUSLY WRITTEN" WORK ONLY by Vera Rich.
6000 points, ended November 26, 2008, 127 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Firstly, the line spacing of this poem is perfect. It completely fits the topic and word choice (also incredible!)
Secondly, I applaud your creative mind for being able to twist the word bank into something this profound and poetic. Wonderful job!
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Thank you for entering my "Celebrating poetry and poets" competition. But I think you must have misunderstood the rules. For I do not see any reference in your entry to poets and/or poetry. (Maybe you intended the "bells" to be a metaphor for poetic inspiration - however, if this is the case, I have to say that this is by no means clear. )I wish you success with it elsewhere - but on this occasion, I think I must say "no".
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Ah! That was definitely a misunderstanding on my part. I'm sorry for any trouble I may have caused =/
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great write.. i had to read it twice to make sure i had the right meaning.. beautifully written
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That is definitely better :-P, lol, by any chance did you save the old one as well? Itd be cool to compare them, lol.
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Of course I did =D Send me your email, and I'll send it over as an attachment
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LOL, it reminded me of the Bleach captain :-P. Which is awesome, cause hes cool. But for real, that was cool, no doubt!
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I never thought about it that way, since I actually got inspiration from a book I read. But now that you mention it, it does kinda remind me of him. He's so cool
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just fantastic, i love word bank stuff, and this is no acception, and you made it rhyme too! great job! best of luck in the contest
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I actually never meant for it to rhyme, and even after you mentioned it, I couldn't find it. Then, I was looking it over after I had noticed a typo and I realized that that last line of my stanzas did rhyme! I never noticed it before-good eyes there
Thank you, and I'm glad you liked it ^^
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