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Hippie Boy

Ive fallen for a hippie boy
He makes me feel happiness and great joy

We began to hang out
And feelings began to sprout

And We laid on my bed
As I listened to everything he said

We moved to the couch
Cause my mom was being a grouch

His rubbed me knee and looked me in the eye
Said such sweet things, I almost began to cry

The he kissed me
I was as happy as I could be

Now were together, me and hippie boy
Still happy and still filled with joy


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Written February 1st, 2004

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  • shortfatguy
    April 26, 2004
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    hey if you can deal with the patchouli smell go for it!! lol cute write!!

  • Flagrancy
    February 2, 2004
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    lol cute cute

  • a quiet dreamer
    February 1, 2004
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    i liked it, too much like that avil lavine girl thing for em though. that whole skater boy shit.. meh, you got love spread throughout the entire poem tho, good job none the less.