double helixed genetic inevitability
time-bombs this ravaging decay of flesh
as
the
decline
comes, physical and mental,
life unwinds,
slows,
thins –
anticipatory last breath regrets
at never having said
“I love you”
In a list
A contest entry
- Avant-Garde As Possible by Mr Id.
400 points, ended November 11, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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like very much
and all too true
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The heaviness of the entrance line ...
called the reader to full attention. And what followed was indeed somber ... and the story of many souls. Stripped to paralyzes, the chords may find it is too late to breathe those words ...
Heart-wrenching write.
The typography added to the unfolding agony.
Be well, Poet.
Myra
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That ending is perfect, unexpected, and downright brilliant. I love this too. I think you've a way with your streamlining your thoughts into concise, and very simply understood sentences.
Wonderful work, and yes. . .Im listing this to
Much love,
Jin
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Incredible work indeed!
I like succinct, condensed, concentrated stuff like this. It is intensely enjoyable to read and there is a lot compacted into a small space.
Good luck in contest
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I think yours will win; it's far superior to mine.
Nice work, and good luck!
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