This gargoyle laughs, smiles and stares
Plastic love and tattered care
Mechanically, he takes my hand
Preaches how he understands
Pathetic, naive, stupid fuck
You want to know me? Well good luck
I look at him then turn away
Count the minutes I must stay
I close my eyes and dream your face
Shining eyes, a smile of grace
Lips as gentle as a rose
Hands that'd heat me through my clothes
Wishing that I wouldn't remember
Your gorgeous face, so blue and tender
It took so long to see the rope
I ran to you with foolish hope
I touch the cuts inside my leg
They feel as tender as an egg
I touch the skin inside my wrist
Then ball my hands into a fist
I need so bad to end this all
To float away and hear your call
To feel the pressure of your lips
And touch your neck, your ribs, your hips
I promised you I'd stay alive
It's all I can do to survive
Thinking of a shiny blade
The one thing you did not forbade
Author notes
SilentMoonlight
"Self-mutilation is a very different issue to suicide. It is a controlled pain personal to you, allowing you to live/exist to some degree."- Unknown
Guideline: Rhyme. AABB. 5 stanzas minimum.
Love the prompt; it made my mind take off
I wrote it this was because the prompt was very personal to me; my parents forced me to see a shrink for awhile because I was cutting over a boyfriend who killed himself. I didn't cut to kill myself - it was the closest I could get to him.
The first event that sucked me into the real world
Hope ya like it 
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I knew you'd love the prompt - I loved it myself! I think it's because of quotes like these that mean so much and challenge the expected that led me to being an avid quote collector.
Anyway, when I first started writing, your rhyme left m in awe - and that's why I gave you the prompt - I wanted to feel it again. You really didn't fail me - I loved it!
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excellent expression
Wow..............you express your emotions so well in this write. The rhyming is perfect, not missing a beat.
Best wishes in this contest!
Jeannette 
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With "gargoyle" you have this reader back on the balcony of the Notre Dame Cathedral in Paris... hmmm... something tells me that you're not into mechanical (superficial) relationships... and you yearn for another... the author's notes shed light on the piece- but only a parallel light- as the piece created an abstract world of its own...
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Thanks you for commenting and taking the time to read into the lines.
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God what you said in your author notes just made me go like, woah... You say that this piece is personal so I don't really know what to say, I don't want to say something that might offend you.
I liked the poem, there were some parts that I really liked and some not so much. It has a hauntingly beautiful feel to it, which I loved aswell. But I am so sorry that this has happened to you dear. I hope everything's ok now.
Best of luck in the contest!
Take care
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This piece reminded me a lot of what happened to me when I was thirteen. I had to see a several shrinks and was put in a hospital for depression, cutting, and a suicide attempt. Cutting is something I've always struggled with, even seven years after I first started. It's something that I despise but am too stupid and destructive to give up. I guess I've always been like that. I like destruction though, it's a fatal form of rebirth but I always feel like I'm moving forward with life. It's a strange irony I guess.
You did a fantastic job describing that break down and addiction. It's scary but so damn beautiful at the same time.
all my love
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