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The Boy

Down a dark hallway,
Around a few turns,
Through a locked bedroom door,
Lays a knife on the floor,
The boy the boy,
That used this as a torture toy,
Is writhing in pain,
Bleeding out going insane,
Crying out and being ignored,
The boy the boy!
He's got a sword!
The boy the boy!
He's hanging from a cord!
From the boy the boy
,
The blood poured.

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  • Rmh4933
    November 11, 2008
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    such a sad ,dark, vivid well written write


  • HatedLoveDieingRose
    November 11, 2008
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    wow

    this poem is wonderful. words cant decribe it.. wonderful Job!!!!!