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solo soul

my soul covers the pain
for i can hide with simple words
mask my pitiful heart
buried deep within
attempting love
yet no emotion found
my soul lost
the worst mistake
shut out now
i am dead
not on the outside
instead a lifeless soul
sad and broken i was
if only i could feel
for i know one glance
your way would bring my soul
but only the pitiful heart
i once held

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  • transit
    December 1, 2008

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    hmmm

    The wordplay is good and it seems like a constant rebellion throughout this poem. It is like a dance and the background fitted perfectly. good lcuk!1

    transit~