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Between hell and a heartbeat


Slowly I caress the tight curve of your lip
a dream held between sulphur and midnight.
Screams bring earthen tremors
awakening aches of when I was in his place.
silver sharp, I slice my dreams
deep beneath your quivering heart
tasting the warmth within you
your soul beats on a platter
bathing in the red darkness
between hell and a heartbeat.





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  • enlightenedatheist
    July 3

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    winderful job simply great i love the overall flow that is aided by the perfect word choice really makes this piece awesome (lol)

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    November 23, 2008
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    This reads so darkto me, thoughI don't believe it was supposed to be -

    very nicely done.


  • YOtta
    November 14, 2008

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    I’m all smiles and…. *deep breath* …. I have to say you’ve awakened the demons inside me!
    What an extraordinary piece, from top to end I was drawn within your hell pit of desires and aching… ohh the aching is surreal! And your closure... “Between hell and a heartbeat” damn, here you left me speechless!

    you captured sensualism without using explicit terms however, the effect you had, the expressions and choice of words that you used the WAY you used them had a huger effect on me that any erotica poem I read so far!

    You have a fan of your work right here.
    What a joy to read! =)

    • NomDePlume silver member
      November 14, 2008
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      You are my pleasure ; )

      Now that is the kind of friendly feedback that we can only hope for!
      I force myself to write many different types of work, but by far the most enjoyable to me would be the sensual ones, similar to what you have just read. It was perhaps more notable about two years ago when I held the name "Death" on this site. Things change and we all must move forward. Thank you for your sweet comments. You are too,too, kind...

      • YOtta
        November 14, 2008
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        Aww.. I'm just frank, really =)

        Should you make a contest of your own, please inform me.
        I guess we both love the same kind of sensual writing.


  • sunoir
    November 12, 2008
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    I love poems that create emotion through imagery. I could feel and see this one.


  • Always Deena
    November 10, 2008
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    Perfection,as always~
    I miss you~

    • NomDePlume silver member
      November 10, 2008
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      Thanks!

      Usually, I miss myself as well! Thanks Deena for the kudos!
      Michael

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