I’m afraid to taste
The fruit I’ve forever dreamt of
The so called “forbidden fruit”
Of my furtive desires
What’s there to haste?
It can’t be leashed
Yes, that untamed beast within me
Unpresumptuous, unsheathed
Exploding in the most scarce forms
Between my thighs it teases and roams
But I was taught to fear
Resist, endure and deny
Myself the ever so alluring flavor
The ripen ooze slowly drifting
Down my sacredness of flaming pink skin shifting
Moist angst sinful eminence of stripped flesh
My heaven enthroned upon an apple
Trembling thighs quiver within yearning
Thoughts weeping erectness enticing hardness
Ripe, scrumptious, parched and raw
A plate of sexual nourishments thaw
In a desert of hazardous movements
Reverberating through my aching insides
Going up and down my spine
Deep into my soul and back into my skin
Passions of lust surrender’s to the ogres of the night
Shivering nights of immortality infatuates
Passion deeply resigned
Traced along the voluptuous
Fragrant cradle of a smile
Words beyond a spark of ecstasy
A narcosis of a dream
She imagines her lover a nard
An only presumed fragrance beam
Author notes
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But of the tree of knowledge;
Good and Evil.
Thou shalt not eat of it;
For in the day that thou eatest thereof,
Thou shalt surely die.
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This one leave me.....
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i'd like to see the untamed beast in me. it might satisfy the beast in me too...a great poem, with brilliant images...provocative indeed!
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Oh my god...this poem is unbelievably good! The images it conjures are mind-blowing and intense! Please, write more, your writing style is amazing. I think I will add you to my favourites.
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wow your word choice and obviously vocabulary are quite insane in this lol exellent job on this loved the hole thing. simply blows anything i have even came close to writting.
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Very "alluring" ...I loved how you added so many adjetives in there, the best ones by my opinion. It's kind of odd, or say, ironic how you link the Forbidden Fruit with sexual desires. I can see it as a sin but...agg, my opinion doesn't really matter. All that matters is this poem rocks, and is descriptive and conceptual in almost every aspect.
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aww lol, thanx for your feedback!
but i care, i want your opinion!
i demand it ! NOW lol
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You really do? Well here goes, i don't care if you disagree or whatever. I see the forbidden fruit as a character traits us human beings have, 'choosing right from wrong'. The the fact that you mentioned in the AN, "you will surely die", seems like your facing a sort of death sentence. Maybe you meant it by a sort of overwhelming guilt. Or someone catching you do it. I see the death as a spiritual death, which Adam had when he bit the "Forbidden Fruit" He was excomunicated from the presence of God (like i said, i don't care if you disagree). But, now us humans are born with this, "death" all from his actions; i find it odd that you at all mentioned this in the AN; So, now i'm even more confused. If i was you (no hard feelings ;] ) i would add something about Sodom and Gamorah. ... ? ... OK, nm, i'm kind of tired. I've been working on this poem of mine for 3 days. Yeah, my brian needs a break. Sorry if i did not explain it more thoroughly. I'll shutup.
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Ahh finally someone with a frank opinion.
With the forbidden fruit, yes, was inspired of Adam when he bit what was forbidden to him to be condemned a mortal life on earth.
The obvious path would’ve been to talk about Sodom and Gomorrah.
Instead I spoke of “forbidden desires" and here lies a slight twist to my own thoughts, reflected upon the forbidden “fruit”. I wanted to provoke such reactions as yours. Glad I was successful at that.
That was briefly explained to justify my point of view.
Again, I’m very fond of your genuine opinion- always admired and respected =)
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Awesome
Makes my poems look weak. I LOVE it, made me feel what you were wanting me to feel. Keep on writing.
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Desire
Flamed by denial, hoarded within the most sacred and desired fire of the flesh aches to release, to fill and be filled. The gift of life it's own fruit,joining two as one flesh, an implanted soul from a single seed of lust and love.
Another awsome write! I will read more of your work!
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Your comment in its self is a poem to me!
Thankyou for your kind and inspiring feedback!
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very imagenitive and abstract with ur choice of words... i love the whole meaning of the poem.. it had my intrest from the title.."Forbidden fruit".. i dont know if alot of ppl go through this kinda emotional tease.. but i know what its like.. haveing something u want and need so bad but know that its not yours and might never be yours..
the passion and longing forces us to break any rule...
But of the tree of knowledge;
Good and Evil.
Thou shalt not eat of it;
For in the day that thou eatest thereof,
Thou shalt surely die.
sure we'll eat of it.. knowing the outcome doesnt change what we need
loved it.. it makes u think..
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Darling.. i think we ate too many apples.. LOL!
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Yes!! thats for sure we have..
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Outstanding
This poem is full of passionate warmth, sensual and inviting and yet there is a sense of "forbidden fruit" that the body should be denied in some way. I liked your choice of language and the way you developed the theme and could find little fault. You could possibly improve it by adding more punctuation just to break it up a bit. Over all I thought this was excellent and I liked the notes which made me stop and think.
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yes, that untamed beast within me
unpresumotuous, unsheathed
exploding in the most scarce forms
between my thighs it teases and roams
these are some of the beautiful lines you have written. i also liked the "stripped flesh"
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you, oh you already know my reaction to this.
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Do i now?!
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