Your love for me is like the dawn,
it brings light to a tired world.
I stand in the rays of its oncoming warmth,
and revel in its spontaneous beauty.
Regardless of where I roam on this earth,
you find me, you reach me, you hold me...
Please, let the dawn of your love
fill in the shadows of my soul
and illuminate every inch of my life.
A contest entry
- You never know.... by Cyanide Dreams.
1640 points, ended May 12, 77 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think!
Comments
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79
Title: 8/10
Originality: 8/10
Emotion: 7/10
Grammar/Spelling: 9/10
Flow/Structure: 8/10
Imagery: 7/10
Overall Use of Poetic Devices: 7/10
Reaction: 8/10
Rules: 10/10
Overall: 7/10
Totaling: 79/100
Hm, this is the start of something really good, but this had poor use of poetic devices. Show us don't tell us! Use more metaphors in this. This could also use more elaboration. I liked the emotion in this piece, short, simple, and sweet. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Josh
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