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I Opened My Eyes... And Got Sunburn

As I opened my new eyes,
And registered all the new beautiful sights and sounds,
Like the crisp golden leaves scattered across the partially snowy floor,
How the bleak sun makes the icy white glitter,
The delicate, twittering chirp of a cardinal, 
A thought suddenly pops in my head...



Why the heck is it so warm?

Author notes

6. What was Frosty the snowman’s first thought when he came to life?

I kind of took the prompt like it was Global Warming ! Where I live, we had a dry winter, to my content :] In fact, it was a little sunny on some days. I honestly hate the cold -_- Especially winter...

Anyway, I hope this was alright ! Lol I know the title's interesting... I've been trying to be more creative with my titles. I don't want them to relate 100% to the poem. I'm stealing Panic At The Disco and Fall Out Boy's technique ;] Please tell me what you think. Don't lie out of courtesy xD I can take it...

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  • daviscth silver member
    November 16, 2008

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    You did a wonderful job with this!!! The ending line really makes it all fall into place and I enjoyed the imagery. Thanks so much for sharing.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    November 10, 2008
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    Cute write

    And yes it ended perfect for the muse