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Tear Drop

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Love
God’s gift
To this world
His only son Jesus
Christ the Lamb of God
Freely sacrificed his life
For the sin of mankind
To forgive our sins
Save our soul
Cause God
Loves
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By Hardluck

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should look like a tear drop.

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  • Denerica silver member
    November 29, 2008

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    Awesome

    Having the words shaped like a teardrop and still give way to the meaning...this is just beyond words, give yourself a lot more credit for now on!


  • Panicked-Puppet-xXx
    November 10, 2008

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    Exquisite Job...

    Absolutely fantastic, It does look like a tear drop, well done. I thought this poem was beautiful, held lots of emotion and gratitude. A lovely tribute of thanks to God and Jesus. Awsome job, please keep writing. I will always be there to comment...