A fire rages within my soul
Burning passion consuming me
I need this destruction to be free
Set free my rage to rule the night
Your heart must die the way mine did
Crying, broken. I'll have no remorse
This is for every beautiful lie you told
Author notes
Suck. Butt.
A contest entry
- Hate by ApathysEnemy.
650 points, ended November 22, 2008, 35 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Angry?!! Show me just how angry you are... by starving-to-survive.
1250 points, ended January 25, 89 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Does not suck!!!! that is incredible. In so few words you have managed to get every hair on my body standing on ends! The emotion, anger and sheir rage is just fantastic. There are very few people who can put so much emotion in so few words. Well done hun, you have a hell of a lot of talent. Thank you for entering my contest
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Powerful
Lots of intense emotion. I like how you directed it and brought it into perspective. Lots of anger for sure, but I like the "beautiful lie" part. Sometimes they are so beautiful huh? Then when the truth dawns..........whoa, what a betrayal! You brought that out so powerfully in this poem.
Great job,
CP
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Thanks again for all the wondeful comments! For some reason my notifications aren't working and telling me when people are reading my stuff lol.
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wow that was really good!! I wasn't sure in the first stanza because of the rhyme, it's rather forced if you ask me. The second stanza was amazing though and the last line killed it!! It was well-written and seemed to be well thought out. If you fix the first stanza a little bit, it'll be even better!!
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