Sighs of depression, slowly set in
as howling winter winds begin.
Collar turned up, along trail home
as chill of night reaches bone.
Full moon frosted, in high thin cloud
mantle of winter, spreads its shroud.
First snow falling, forest weaves
down to blanket autumns leaves.
Deathly quiet, this well worn trail
leading me home will never fail.
In the distance, a faint red glow
almost home, my pace has flow.
Trail is quickly turning white
not to worry home in sight.
Sweet scent of burning pine
anticipating warmth divine.
Stamping feet on mat by door
I step inside my spirits soar.
All worry’s and fear subside
as fire burns in hearth so wide.
A pleasing sight, from a winter’s roam
contented comfort, of hearth and home.
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A contest entry
- Picture Prompt - snow, winter... by aboomer.
700 points, ended December 2, 2008, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Out Rhyme Rakerman1 by piccola.
900 points, ended June 6, 58 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Rhyme by Diminished Capacity.
700 points, ended July 28, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is very beautifully written. I love the way you describe walking a trail home in the first falling snow. Sounds so beautiful to me. I enjoyed the read!!! Thank you for entering my contest.
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Interesting
This is written so well,the font size and picture add depth and meaning. I like this entry,although more use of color would have heighten the poems strength. -
Great job with this write, there's nothing like winter. You did wonderful with the rhyme and it flowed smoothly. Thanks for entering.
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Another great write from you! 2 gold trophys! great job on that
thank you for entering my contest and good luck
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wow...very amazing images with this. i enjoyed reading it. thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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nicely written but I only noticed one season in this and I did ask for all 4 seasons. Thanks for entering this into my contest. And thanks for sharing this with us.
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Some nice pretty imagery.
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Congratulations on the gold trophy. This poem has wonderful appeal to me. I love the picture you have painted. It reminds me of us taking a walk in the snow and coming home to find a nice warm fire going. Thanks for sharing this.
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So Lovely "CONGRATULATIONS
This was a delight to read and had such lovely imagery. It was like walking on the trail home with you. This so deserved the Gold. Nice to meet you in this group of oldies but goodies..
You take care, Smiles. Have a lovely day. Sandy
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OH NOW this is so good,flows and paints the picture I would want to know, thank you for sharing...
M
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Good lord, it almost makes me wish winter was still here!
It was such a pleasant, heartwarming read, hon.. Thanks so much..
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Great, liked this its beautiful and congrats on the gold win nicely written
Shuberth
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The poem seems to speak to you through the words. It's kind of spooky at first but good all the way through. A solid 3 on the wow factor. You have a total of 31 points. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you. kahy
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Such a beautiful poem. It had a very, very nice to it. It also paints a pretty picture of winter's first snow fall. Wonderful write.
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beautifully done.... lovely imagery and nice feeling to it
Thanks for entering my contest,
and best of luck!
Your judge,
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congrats on the gold. This is filled with rich imagery and is a pleasure to read. It reaches out to more than one sense and makes me even feel the cold.
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So very sweet. It makes me feel homesick, even though I am home.
Great write and thanks for entering!
~Memoirs
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I like the sentiments in this alluding to the warmth of the family and those we love dearly, it is always nice to be reminded of the important things in life.
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I think this entry is fantastic. I found this edition to literature to be witty and charming. I truly feel the imagery warmed my soul. At this time of year,it plays on ones basic desire to be home for the holidays, even though I don't think that was exactly your intention, that is the emotion it stirred for me. I could envision the path, and feel the chill as I read this one. Very well done.
Best of Luck in this contest and Happy Holidays!
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well done with pic prompt!
I hate snow. I hate the cold, the ice, the snow, the wind, the power outages, winter traffic, and snow drifts. But I really do relax with home in sight, and a warm fire going inside the wood stove.
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Thank you for your most well expressed entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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a depressing write.
you did a great job in potraying the emotion, because as i read this, i felt a sigh behind each word.
thanks for sharing this and all the best
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Amazing! Your phrasing is beautiful, and your rhyme is great! I wasn't sure if I wanted to allow rhyme in this contest, but after seeing this, I'm glad I did! The way you rhyme makes it look natural; it flows freely and I don't think in any way it could look forced. One of my favorite things about this lovely piece was the lack of articles, like
"Full moon frosted, in high thin cloud
mantle of winter, spreads its shroud."
You could have said "A mantle of winter" and "A full moon frosted", but you didn't, and it gives more depth and a different angle to your words and the theme. I've only seen that done a few other times on here, and you showcase the idea well.
Thanks for sharing this piece with me, I'm glad you entered the contest!
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Lovely! such a nice, warm feeling to this. Great wording and images, wonderful flow! I enjoyed this....I liked it all, but especially,
'Full moon frosted, in high thin cloud
mantle of winter, spreads its shroud.
First snow falling, forest weaves
down to blanket autumns leaves.'
Thank you for this lovely entry
best wishes in the contest
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Vivid is this poetical story
Beautifully penned and I loved the rhyme that matched so well with your words
Thank you and best wishes to you
Julie
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a brilliant take on the promt your imagery and emotions are fantastic I love the last stanza good luck inthe contest
marailsa
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