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Gods Love

The light peeked through my heart
like it was reading my very soul
In my own little paradise
at the end of the seashore
Watching the time pass me by
as it had no special meaning
During that moment, i was blessed
with the love of the almighty God

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  • Samplette gold member
    November 20, 2008

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    "I was blessed with the love of the almighty God" A great ending. Beautiful words. Thank you for entering the contest.
    Sam

  • Mickie27
    November 11, 2008

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    I liked the simplicity of this and really found it answered the picture well with true feelings. very well written with great imagination that stretches beyond the picture.