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A Rap on the Door

a rap on the door?
wind?
let me see
YOU!!!!!!!!!
sh..sh..
rustling of leaves
caressing
breeze
storm
tempest..

she did all that to me what you might read in an erotica.

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  • usefuldistraction
    March 14
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    Exquisite poetry...laughing to myself it is so good, brilliant!


  • oceanbluize
    November 19, 2008

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    this is a freakin awesome poem! god i love the command of simplicity to explain a deep underlying thought. outstanding write. I want to creep inside your mind to see what else intriguing lurks there! Sublime write beautiful.


    • Ms Lez
      December 9, 2008
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      oceanbluize

      thx 4 ur a very good comment indeed. ure welcome to creep inside my mind and body

  • sexygoddess18
    November 16, 2008
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    Simple

    I wanna here more sexual stuff in the poem. Tease me a little hey make me feel what you are doing.


    • Ms Lez
      December 9, 2008
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      sexygoddess18

      may i suggest u make ur imagination a liitle more ctive. i'm soorry i cd not stimulate u enough


  • Femmalicious1
    November 14, 2008
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    Very intriguing...give rise to a multitude of possibilities.


    • Ms Lez
      December 9, 2008
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      Femmalicious1

      i dont mind if each of the "multitude of possibilities" r explored. i enjoy novelty


    • Ms Lez
      November 14, 2008
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      Femmalicious1

      yes possibilities are limitless


  • tumultuous
    November 12, 2008
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    i dig it

    i really like this style! glad you like my poem.


  • YOtta
    November 11, 2008

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    You Got My Attention!

    Never seen this style before but it’s always a start for something incredible.
    It’s definitely reflected by your title “A rap on the door”, but.. I urge you to prolong your poem, it’s intriguing enough that I want to read more of what you have to say.

    I just read your comment you don’t have to reveal details but perhaps twist and turn it to raise intensity! So there ya go... lol

    So much potential =)


    • Ms Lez
      November 11, 2008
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      YOtta

      I might give the details in someother poem some time. thx 4 the comment. ure a beauty.

      • YOtta
        November 11, 2008
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        Aww okay, looking forward to that!
        I’ll be checking to see more poems from you to comment on.

        Take care hun !


  • my.stars.dont.shine
    November 10, 2008
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    Stunning!

    Def. leaves you wondering! =)


  • Galaxy2
    November 10, 2008

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    Wow...
    Great!...
    Really great!...
    I can well imagine what might have happened to you, honey!
    Congratulations!...
    and don't forget to share your pleasure with me too...
    Kissesssss all over you, sweet smelling cutie!
    Gal


  • movedon
    November 10, 2008

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    WRITE MORE!

    i want more! i need to know what happens!

    love
    mylee


  • Ms Lez
    November 10, 2008
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    I can't tell the details. I love mysteries.

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