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defeat

if only my fingertips
felt the way hers did
when they would trace
the space between
my head and my shoulders
up around my ear
and
if only
my fingertips
felt

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  • spiritualangel
    November 30, 2008
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    Simply beautiful. Best of luck.


  • george the 23rd
    November 12, 2008

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    This is simple and sweet. It seems to almost be written in a sing-song whisper. This is why I like your writing. You have so many facets, and they all sparkle.


  • Atrophya
    November 12, 2008
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    --->agrees with Aesthete


  • Aesthete
    November 10, 2008

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    you can make all the same motions but it's not the same by yourself.. so true.

    and i love the ending,
    to say they don't feel like hers,
    but they don't even feel at all.

    good stuff.