When you feel alone and blue
like nobody is there for you
Know that I'll always be true
there's nothing more I'd rather do.
In times of the unknown
it will be this love that will be shown
No matter how big the bone
our love will stay in the safety zone.
We are all far from being pure
but in your heart I do endure
The passions so positive and sure
that eventually I will come on love's shore.
I'm looking for something that fits like a glove
not wanting to be pushed on, pulled or shoved
What I'm looking for comes from angels and God above
that is indeed nothing short of being the perfect love.
In a list
A contest entry
- "Prewrites " + Plus by wingsofgold25.
600 points, ended November 20, 2008, 67 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please don't critique this.
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This is sweet and sincere. One thing: I would change the 'shove' in the 3rd last line to 'shoved'. I think it'll still rhyme with 'glove' and will be in the same tense as 'pushed' and 'pulled' rather than making it stand out. But it's still a very nice poem either way.
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this is soooo sweet. I love the rhyme... the way it flows. I like it a lot. Thanks for sharing this and thanks for placing it into our reading list.
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A beautifully rhyming poem about love - nicely penned
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Interesting poem... I love the monorhyme quatrains (even if you really, really stretched for some of the rhymes
) Nicely done.
Ken
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Very beautifully written bro!
It's great to read you again and congratulations
to you on your trophy here. Keep it up and
take care!
Jeremy0826 -
yes..I agree with you dear friend..your words are true..the immages are impressive and the impact is wonderful here..well done....
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The Perfect Love
What a great thought and you have said it all in the last two lines.
Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest.
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I loved it
I loved it this is amazing
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yes..indeed you are very true..and you have made it very strong piece to reveal this truth..very sharp and very solid immages is there to prove your point..well done...
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That's awesome and such a sweet poem!
Something that we all are searching for
everyday in our lives. The perfect love
and one that will stand the test of time.
Well done bro!
Jeremy0826 -
Good show of emoton. Whoever it's for is a lucky one. "No matter how big the bone
our love will stay in the safety zone" try "within the safty zone". But all in all I really like it. -
thanks for adding this to our reading list. I know that you are a wonderfully talented writer and I am glad to have you in our friends group. Thanks for sharing this with us.
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i think this is a wonderful poem that you have written here my friend, truly something, keep it flowing
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