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A heart has wings, concealed under the atriums
impersonating valves.
They flutter, asking softly
for it's body to move on.

There is no cure for a trapped heart
but to ask it's captor to let the muscle free.

Let me know, really, truly, what you think of it...

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  • ashleyheartsyou
    December 10, 2008

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    i like this one. i haven't been on allpoetry in a long time, it was great to come read one of your poems i love how i can relate to all of your poems, especially this one.


    • vitamin.M
      December 11, 2008
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      thank you dearie! it HAS been forever, haven't seen any of your writing in a long while! hope you are doing well!



  • Jaden silver member
    December 6, 2008
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    Probably a little too direct for metaphor. But that's just my opinion.