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Piety

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Crushed emotion
of piety displayed
I have ONE hope
a pleading desire.


Creator of life;
end my STRIFE
let me surrender
my soul to you.


Reaching unseen;
I feel unspoken
words, like flame's
ROARING within.


You are there,
you're everywhere
our WATCHER, perfect
in peace; connect
my heart with THEE.





Author notes

Quote: Oh God ! connect me to yourself as I am the disconnected wire...Unknown.

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  • nature
    December 10, 2008

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    Till today,without bias.....

    ...and with confidence I can truly relate with the poem signifying ones deep urge within to be one with the almighty God.
    There is nothing greater than merging with the divine spirit and even saints long and thirst for such an infinite moment with divinity.
    Lol
    you must be close to God to write about your love for HIM.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    November 22, 2008

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    Humm..great summping up the scenario of the connectivity is here..and made me quite convinced about the reach..well done indeed..


  • Arkbear gold member
    November 19, 2008

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    Oh how lovely Novy.....simply stunning work here.....everything from Presentation to message....gorgeous!

     

    Thank you for sharing this with us.....with me,

     

    God bless you,

     

     

    Bear ~


  • raingoddess gold member
    November 11, 2008

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    Excellent poem you have written, I am speechless what more can I really say, thank you for sharing and keep them coming.


  • Internal Struggle
    November 11, 2008

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    i thought it was very spritual and i liked it alot.. it was very touching and a very humbling
    surrendering yourself to God
    it had a great flow
    good job and good luck


  • Swangrnv gold member
    November 11, 2008
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    Oh god..

    This is one of the most beautiful pieces I've ever read..Absolutely stunning, I applaud you.


  • Justmenow
    November 11, 2008

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    such a powerful poem, i'm not religious at all but this had so much powerful emotion in it i can understand why people do, i love the final stanza and the caps in some places show the deepness of your emotions, well done and keep on writing.


  • georgie
    November 11, 2008

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    i love the poem im just not so keen on the caps in certain places. i still feel you have captured the soul of the picture beautifully,
    hugs,
    georgie,
    xxx


  • Rovingone gold member
    November 10, 2008

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    Such a profound and emotional reaching out to God. The last stanza is the most powerful realization of his presence. Very drawing in it's context, it makes a beautiful testimony.

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