Why did you have to hurt me,
Why did you have to break me,
I was already complete,
so why try to re-envent me,
why do you talk to me like that,
why do you wear a frown ,
why do you hold me up
when you want to let me drown?
you have no idea do you
inside my heart is bleeding
if my pain became a note
you'd think it was not worth reading
WHY DO YOU MAKE ME SCREAM
why do i live in fear
why does this pain rip right through
whenever reality appears
well i am better than that
i have my OWN god damn mind
and its you who is deluded
and you that'll lose in time
...........
why do you look at me
why do you cry?
Because i am a mirror
And its you who lies.
Author notes
**Heartbroken-Headcase**
Moderndayvampire
A contest entry
- First contest,Four options, i'll love you forever if you enter? by Jaffa-.
560 points, ended November 11, 2008, 37 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please comment on this,I was wierdly out of breath when i finished this...
Comments
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I can so imagine why you were out of breath. It's an amazing peice and very full of emotion. Wonderful write and yes, very much perfect for this competeition. I absolutly adored how We didn't fine out exactly what was going on untill the end. I loved when you put the CAPITALS in, it made it seem as if they were shouting, or maybe even singing. Yes this could be a song, a very good song. This was amazing and beautiful use of emotion.
''why do you talk to me like that,
why do you wear a frown ,
why do you hold me up
when you want to let me drown?''
That was my favourite part, i thought it really stood out and that's the stanza that made the poem into a whole diferent and even more amazing.
I'd love to know if you just came up with this out of the blue or if you had inspiration. Or if this is just how you really feel. I'm sorry you had so much trouble trying to get it in but i'm glad that your persistant
Thank you very much for the amazinjg penmanship and good luck in the contest. xo
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