You are in every second of my thoughts
Every pleasant dream I have ever had
You were always there
I couldn't imagine love would be what you gave me
I never knew it would be this way until I met you
It was the way I wanted it to be, deeply passionate and mesmerising
Beautiful and sincere like an everlasting blessing
I think that's what you call 'true love'
It seems every dream I ever had,
You were an integral part of it
Did I dream you into my life?
I wished for you
I prayed for you
I hoped you would be there
Every second, every moment
I thought of you
That's when I found you
I needed a love that made me feel
Truly blissful and mesmerized
And when I found you
I realized no one could love me
As much as you
You made me feel as if I were the queen of your dreams
Your love is the essence of my life
Unseen, unspoken, unheard and undefined
Are you a dream come true?
A prayer answered?
A gift from the almighty?
Did I dream you into my life?
Did I really deserve you?
Did I really deserve love so pure and true
Unblemished and unscathed
Oh God, I Thank You a million times
Every time I think of you,
I know you are a blessing god sent
I couldn't believe love existed
Until I found you
I never knew you would come
After so many years of waiting
To free my soul from the exile
The years of painful confinement
That had torn my soul leaving me tattered
You were written in my destiny
Embedded in the depths of my palm
That is what it is
The entwining of souls and bodies
'The entwining of destinies'
A union beatified by the Almighty
You are a blessing from the heavenly abode
You are there in my heart
And with each passing day, I love you more
You are definitely a dream come true
21st "June" 2008
© 2006-2009 Rinzu Susan Rajan
Author notes
PROMPT:QUOTE 2
A contest entry
- Pre-writes, with conditions by WarrioroftheHeart.
550 points, ended March 18, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - You're the answer to my prayers by xXGoddessofPainXx.
500 points, ended August 10, 18 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - contest of options: might help your writers block :D by celestial.
625 points, ended September 17, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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This is beautiful. I love this love write. The last two stanzas are beautiful. If only I could feel this way, and find Mr.Right....sigh
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Where do you come from? Haha I was just going to announce the winner when I saw one unread piece and this piece is so good! Haha you people really are funny. This piece is just so brilliant I love it thank you so much forentering
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This was a very moving piece, full of love and emotion. It was truly an amazing write, and held my attention all the way to the end.
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I love the 6th stanza. This would be a dream come true for me to feel like the queen of someone's dreams, to have this kind of love, and this particular prayer be answered.
The 10th stanza is just amazing. "You were written in my destin/embedded in the depths of my palm" That is so beautiful.
The whole poem is just amazing. Thank you for allowing me to read it.
Hugs,
Lauren
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There is nothing wrong with writing long poems, I do it all the time...gave up trying to enter them in contests for the same reasons you gave. Although I don't think it's because they are boring, no-one ever said hosts had to have long attention spans.
I did enjoy reading this, it was a pleasant love poem, full of the joy that a committed relationship is supposed to offer and, although I personally felt that the two stanzas that follow "I can't believe it's true" to be a little redundant, there is certainly nothing boring in the tale and the emotion it weaves around the reader.
This is definitely a poem you should be proud of, I wish you the best of luck in my contest and hope you continue to write such sincere words from your heart.
Adrian.
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Very well written. I love it. I like the title and how you repeated it in your poem. Awesome write. Keep your chin up and keep on writting!
Shannyn -
very nice. I think though that you could shorten it somewhat. Seemed a little long and that you repeated somewhat. Although you asked many valid questions. And I could feel the wonder that you feel at finding the one you truly love. Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into this contest.
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this reminds me of when i met my boyfriend, only i had kinda given up looking for him and you seem to have been hopefull than i was, but i like it, it actually cheered me up from my lil depression state i was in, so thanks
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mmmm. sometimes i ask myself if im dreaming him also.
but theres no god part in my version of the story.
either way. this was very relatable. and well written.
good job ^_^
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Law of attraction perhaps? Great write.
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Oh my goodness! Bravo! I am usually not a fan for the love poems, but I must say this is absolutely lovely! The emotions ooze from your every word, and the imagery is breathtaking!~Thanks for sharing.~angelwowings2009
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Good write
rhetorical questions on the last stanza are superb.
consider reverting:...until i met you(sounds cliche)
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Very emotional
You really good express yourself about your deams. -
I love it!
this is a very nice poem! I love how you expressed your emotions so clearly -
Beautiful !!!!!!!!! once it is found >>> blessed is the one who has it.. Nice write here
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