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Paper Birds

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Paper Birds

release your mind on paper pages
writings entwined will last for ages
open the cages untie the bind
on paper pages, release your mind

climb to the top above all the rest
don’t ever stop and don’t be depressed
perched in your nest let written words drop
above all the rest, climb to the top

written word will soar into the stream
it’s a small chore to write the extreme
pen your dream in the words you adore
into the stream, written word will soar

paper birds fly from the cage of time
release your words in rhythm and rhyme
turn your page, let cognition imply
from the cage of time, paper birds fly

 

 

 

 

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Challenge: Use the picture and use a Swap Quatrain form.
I increased the dificulty by adding the internal rhyme.
Paper Birds by *kmye-chan

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  • kdom
    April 14
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    I really enjoyed this poem. I don't know why, but I love the title!


  • Ethereal One gold member
    January 26

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    excellent expression

    I really like what you have done using this picture for inspiration. Your rhyming is excellent!

    Good luck in this contest!

    Jeannette


  • wbiro gold member
    January 22

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    interesting form, but more importantly I sensed a certain spirit throughout the piece, as if you almost had fun writing it and had a feeling for the subject...


  • Death of the Author
    November 16, 2008
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    I couldn't have done this. Pretty damn amazing.


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 15, 2008

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    i don't know what to say here but it was like something out of alice in wonderland, i loved that about this poem, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • Cup-a-Joe
    November 11, 2008
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    W0W

    Very nice. You captured the pic. I like the way you write.
    Joe


  • Pure Thought silver member
    November 10, 2008

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    this is something I couldn't accomplish. Thnaks for showing how it should be done.


  • HaleyMary
    November 10, 2008

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    Beautiful write, Amera. Wonderful flow. This poem seems inspiring to me in a way, like getting inspiration from life and getting the mind flowing with thoughts. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.


  • artis
    November 10, 2008
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    love the paper bird references, an unwritten poem to me is like a paper plane...(Plain, that must be inkjetted across a stream of conciousness...lol..superb work amera...


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 10, 2008

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    Wonderfully rhymed

    The picture is gorgeous and I love what you did for it here sis... ahh yes, we pen our dreams! And sometimes our pain.

    Stunning!


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    November 10, 2008

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    You are truly amazing!! You have some of the most brilliant pieces I ever have read!!! This is great!! I love ur imagery!!! You truly portrayed this piece well!!! Fantastic details and descriptions!!!!!!! Every line and word are just perfect!!! I love you lots sis!!


  • Rovingone gold member
    November 10, 2008

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    A true picture of the artist with quill penning the piece for all eternity in her notebook. I can see you at work, your mind turning out the rhyme. And, it fits the picture excellently.


  • Faeryn
    November 10, 2008

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    Wow!! I love this! It's brilliant. The rhyme is wonderful and the picture fits perfectly with the poem.
    Love,
    Tay


  • mysticstorm gold member
    November 10, 2008

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    Amera,
    beautiful as always...so soft and inspirational...I love the last stanza and what a beautiful title and form...always a pleasure.
    mystic


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    November 10, 2008

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    Oh, Amera, this is so uplifting and wonderfully penned of course. You are such an inspiration my dear.


  • malmadre gold member
    November 10, 2008

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    I agree with Jeff. The more rhyme the better. It comes so easy for you, with the internal rhyming woven through, this one is a prizewinner in my opinion.


  • melphleg gold member
    November 10, 2008

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    Impressive, most impressive. I have a difficult time sometimes with just end rhymes. The do rhymes as you have done here would really be a challenge. You piece flows well. The words are wonderful. The entire piece was creative and enjoyable to read. Once again you show off your tremendous talent.


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    November 10, 2008

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    The one thing this hasn't got is a simple beauty to it...it is far more complex but equally spellbinding.
    This was a joy to read and one I stand in awe of

    All the best

    Love
    Sue


  • Have left the stage gold member
    November 10, 2008

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    enchanting

    an origami of prestigous inffluence here. Almost dream-like in perception, in hind-sight such perfection, and only paper as well. Wonderful piece, so enchanting.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    November 10, 2008

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    Beautifully worked swaps and a great take on the prompt, and the more rhyme the better


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