Summoned by the secretary
she strode to the seat in sensible shoes
then sat
and smiled
her skirt below her knees
her jacket well cut
expensive
she answered their questions
with equanimity
They discussed and agreed
such a sensible woman
so suitable
no scandal here.
She beamed
inside
her smile was different
would she have succeeded
had the panel known
that all
their picture of purity
was wearing beneath
her severe suit
was
silk stockings
suspenders
and
scent
A contest entry
- Individual Prompts by kiwigirljacks.
700 points, ended November 15, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me honestly what you think, good or bad.
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What a slightly naughty suprise ending! That little intimate peek was very captivating, and not at all what I expected, which is a fine thing indeed!
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Very good. I liked this one, it brought out your personality which is good to see in poems.
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Ohmygod, a free verse?
This is so well done.
<==and I never lie 
"her jacket well cut
expensive"
Just one of the few observations I enjoyed; they are honest and not pretentious.
"with equanimity"
Ohhh 'equanimity'. A cool word used again, w/o being pretentious (I keep emphasizing this because I keep reading pretentious ass poems people think are good).
That last stanza is awesome; the short line breaks are very effective and cohesive.
Jessica
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See, I knew you could do this prompt! 
This is great! I could see this playing out in my mind.. imagining myself as her lmao!
Very cool write! And freeverse too.. *claps*
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wow, this was an amazing read, Lovely use of vocabulary
Good luck in the contest
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Well, your cute little ditty on my contest page led me to wish to read some of your work, so here I be. Interesting write, to be certain! I loved the end, it was cute and made the entire write so much I had to go back and read it again! I did get caught on the double 'their' in the last stanza, but fix that and it will flow quite as designed I imagine! Toodles! MM & BB LadyP
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Thanks for catching that
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My pleasure, sirrah!
I have enjoyed a few of yours and I will return to them to comment, I am in a bit of pain atm and want to give them my full attention! -
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You are very kind
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Oh my! I’m amazed! This is a captivating free verse. What amazes me is the feminine nuances that you included right down to the sensible shoes. Very few men could pull this off. Bravo!
Love,
Amera♥
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"Picture of purity"
The words do not need to be used in the write, just whatever they inspire. Let me know if that works for you, otherwise another prompt can be given
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Well I'll give it a go, but I have to say it isn't a prompt I would ever choose for myself!
I don't see pictures in my head and purity is a word I apply to chemicals! -
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Like I said, I can give you another prompt if you so wish
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I've done me best, I have even given you free verse
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