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by the light





Hands and feet
bathe instinctively beside the flame
drawing in the need to comfort ones life ~

and he'll stay
like a third party
invited to kindle thoughts
we'd rather forsake

and the wind
with her intentional glaze
blows out the candle
but fuels the fire that keeps us still...

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  • Heart Sutra
    November 29, 2008

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    Thank you for sharing this poem with the contest. I appreciate the use of metaphor and the short succinctness of the poem.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 10, 2008

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    Another wondefully written piece. That second stanza is such a great play on words!


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    November 10, 2008

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    A most narrative piece indeed, with a gentle, hopeful voice. All the best dear.


    mj.


  • notorious gold member
    November 10, 2008
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    "like a third party"<==NICE