Festering bubbles pop
emitting vile mist
clenched deep within
a sticky twisted cyst.
Flesh begins to smoulder
biting holes through skin
leaving charbroiled bone
as venom starts to win.
Burrowing through veins
this pulsating drone
duplicates a thousand fold
for it hates to be alone
Not caring about infection
or scars that leave you cold
it only has a single goal
to turn your skin to mould.
Author notes
Ok...tis different. I went with actual blisters as that's what my muse wanted 
Pic credit: Hellionarius by ~clay5lay
Prompt: blister.
A contest entry
- Individual Prompts by kiwigirljacks.
700 points, ended November 15, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - the biggest prewrite contest ever by serenity silvermoon.
900 points, ended January 18, 367 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I can see who calls cos I'm nosy, so be nice and comment.
Comments
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Oh - forgot to say I love the title - that's what drew me in!!!
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- ooohhh.....how vivid!!...lol
Great wording and images - so real, they make one squeemish!
Well done!!!
Congrats on the HM!

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ewww

Very
and skin crawling write! hehe.. love what you did with the prompt!


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Sorry couldn't resist having some fun with it
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Fabulous poem
The feeling of those cysts breaking out made my skin crawl !
Each stanza raw and dark
Best wishes in the contest and for another amazing dark write
Love Sis x
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Oooooooh no punctuation [not counting the periods at the end of each stanza...LoL]
Anyways, I think that lets this poem breathe...
Do blisters need to breathe, incidentally?
'smolder'<==this word is freaking sexy. LoL...but you made the context totally fitting for a blister; it's unexpected & refreshinnnngggggg like mouthwash
"duplicates a thousand fold"<==badass. Makes me think of origami
Good luck
Jessica

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My friend this is something that i think is golden you did a great job on this, i loved it, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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What excellent imagery. You had me cringing the entire time. Excellent picture to go along with a beautifully disturbing piece. Wonderful use of the prompt. Amazing!


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And how wonderfully dark it is...you do this so well and I always feel the chill from the imagery...love the use of the prompt...
very creative as always...well done...
thank you for sharing...
best to you,
mystic

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This actually put me off my lunch,
very well writen, so much detail ha ha ha

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Blister.. wow,
Is there anything you
cant turn into art?
Great work here!
Good luck in the contest.



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LMAO!!! Fantastic imagery...
Made me smile all the way through...
Great, narrative, rhyme & flow... (as always)
Great rhythm & visualisation of the premise...
So gross but so wonderfully written...
Well penned, well versed, well done!!!

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Muahahahahahah great phrase/reservation title
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"blister"
Let me know if that works for you, otherwise I can give you another
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This is very different, with the barbed wire and the streaming borders.

Well Done....Best wishes in the contest.


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