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A Whole New World

 

 

Feeling your heart beat against my chest,

I look up to find myself lost in your eyes.

Like a rose in bloom a whole new world, 

unfolds before me with such brilliance.

 

Thousands of colors start to explode,

leaving me breathless as I fall into you.

Beautiful galaxies form and explode,

as the sunlight burns brightly in the distance.

 

Clouds move slowly through me,

bringing me closer to your ethereal beauty.

I fall headfirst into another world

where I find myself lost in the heart of you.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt:
150 Words of less

A contest entry

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  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 12, 2008

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    Oh to fall into a world such as that! A very beautiful take on your given prompt.. holding lovely thought and feeling.


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 12, 2008

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    i think this is something golden my friend, you did a great job on this poem, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    November 12, 2008

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    wow my dear brother this is a beautiful poem that you've penned.. I so love it.. the imagery is absolutely gorgeous, and this is filled with so much love, its beyond words.. *big sigh*

    good luck
    kat


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 9, 2008
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    "Held by your eyes"

    Let me know if that works for you, otherwise another can be given