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Yearning

 

Warm summer days
when you were with me
we'd lay on white sands
for hours.

With the sand between our toes
and the sun rays shining on our bodies,
you touched me,
ran your fingers all over me.

My body started to quiver,
my knees, weak.
That feeling of rapture...
I yearned for you to stay.

The cold February came,
and took you away
I stand here in my empty room
staring at the glistening snow.

Somehow, the purity of the snow seems so tainted
without you...

It's cold and I am alone

Just as your touch made me shiver in the past,
I am trembling now even more without you
longing for those warm summer days,
longing for your warm embrace.

Author notes

Prompt: Trembling without your touch

I decided to go with this one eventually. Haha. Not that good, I know. For some reason, I don't know why this was difficult to write But I did write it. Haha

109 words

Picture Credit: http://fc87.deviantart.com/fs14/f/2007/079/0/4/Longing_by_StarMasayume.jpg (It's beautiful isn't it?)

AP Name: Ylova

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  • Emmyb gold member
    July 26
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    amazing


  • Mrs. C.
    December 3, 2008

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    this is very beuatiful.. i myself have poems about losing the warmth of my loves embrace. at first the transition for the sand to your room confused me but the comparsion, though not drict, between the snow and sand tied it together. thank you for entering.


  • Joseph Hollis
    November 27, 2008

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    Laced with the emotions of love lost. You created a beautiful and lonely atmosphere here. This is a powerful write.


  • LadyDementia gold member
    November 14, 2008

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    What a powerful ending, really hits hard. I certainly didn't expect the twist from happy to sad, very well done! And awesome write, superbly penned


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 12, 2008

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    Beautifully done. I think you have captured the prompt so well here, just what I would have envisioned for it!


  • Canadamomma
    November 12, 2008

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    "Just as your touch made me shiver in the past,
    I am trembling now even more without you"
    heart wrenching lines...
    Beautiful write
    Good luck


  • Alyzeh
    November 11, 2008

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    This was sad, but in no way was this ordinary. I even enjoyed the sad emotions that were the essence of this piece of poetry. You've done a brilliant job with this one. Don't worry. It's a winner.

    Much love,
    Alyzeh


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 11, 2008

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    a sad but beautiful poems, that just was something , it was kind of hard for me to read, cause my mind kept seeing too many images,lol, i wanted to stay, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    November 11, 2008

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    Aw those cold feelings as the February came.. and the longing ..
    Beautifully penned honey
    Good luck and best wishes always
    Julie x


  • thejollytinker
    November 11, 2008

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    Got kicked out! Anyway, don't know how this got past me. It's cold and I am alone- no lonlier words in print.


  • MD Masroor
    November 10, 2008

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    Difficult it may have been, but you down right nailed it. It was strong, serene, sad, and beautiful. A pure piece of art from a creative and talented poet is just what the world needs. Good luck in the contest!


  • Hikari Lady
    November 10, 2008

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    It's got a beautiful story in it, told between the lines. The ending was a little weak though. I loved the first stanza and the second, they were so warm and full of imaginary.
    Nice write, sweetie. Good luck in the contest!

    ~Noor


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 10, 2008
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    "Tides of change"

    Let me know if that one works


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 9, 2008
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    "Trembling without your touch"

    Let me know if that works for you, otherwise another can be given

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