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Dreams of the Hind (Pantoum)

There are feathers in the winter air,
That dream and drift in swaths of azure pure,
Mingling with the snow that lingers there,
To my heart, they hold the greatest allure

That dream and drift in swaths of azure pure,
The sweet turtledove that haunts my mind,
To my heart, they hold the greatest allure -
Would my heart were not that of a hind!

The sweet turtledove that haunts my mind
Frisking about in these, my snowy dreams -
Would my heart were not that of a hind,
Would I shall see wings when I gaze in streams!

Frisking about in these, my snowy dreams,
For once I join my dear turtledove,
Would I shall see wings when I gaze in streams,
And in the morn find requited love

For once I join my dear turtledove,
When feathers soft fall from the cloudy sky,
And in the morn find requited love
With my dear turtledove nesting near by

When feathers soft fall from the cloudy sky,
I wake to find my hopes are vain,
With my dear turtledove nesting near by
Only when I sleep in feathered rain

I wake to find my hopes are vain,
For feathered ells shall never grace my back -

Only when I sleep in feathered rain

I dare to hold these dreams of the sumac

 

For feathered ells shall never grace my back -

There are feathers in the winter air -

I dare to hold these dreams of the sumac,

Mingling with the snow that lingers there...

 

 

Author notes

I don't profess to be advanced, but having played with the pantoum before, and being, yes, very masochistic in respect to a poetic challenge, I chose option C, with the content of Winter. A little obvious on that one, though, I'd say...

My syllable count runs::
9,10,9,10/10,9,10,9/9,10,9,10/etc

My rhyme scheme runs::
a,b,a,b/b,c,b,c/c,d,c,d/d,e,d,e/e,f,e,f/f,g,f,g/g,h,g,h/h,a,h,a

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  • intoothandclaw
    January 5
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    Oops, forgot this:

  • intoothandclaw
    January 5

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    All I can say is you did a lot better with it than I would. I haven't dared to take up my own challenge there yet. XD


    • Aerlynne
      January 7
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      I enjoyed it quite a bit. I love challenges and playing with poem forms, so thanks for feeding the masochist!

      ~ Kit