Elfin chantress whispers,
near brilliant muse,
coaxed whimsy.
Crafting wishful dreamers,
once upon a time.
Innocent awareness ripens.
Yesterday's glorified fantasies,
instantly,
faded legend,
inside modern drab adventures.
Breathless bumble lingers...
within forgotten universes,
where illusions are unbroken.
Wings,
tattered,
flicker emptiness.
Centuries of disbelief,
consume wonderland.
Hovering above cradles,
pixie hearts still chance,
discovering unfinished flowers
amidst overgrown gardens.
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Author notes
#9 - Slow-moving Fairies
A contest entry
- PROMPTS IX - Round 2 of 2 - by Bear - by Arkbear.
500 points, ended November 19, 2008, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Oh you are so talented, I love this so soft and tender, grandstand imagery and the flow makes me float through the words, I was taken on a fanatic ride ... I miss you and hope all is well in your life
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Oh my....I have no suggestions here...nothing really to critique......except.....middle-align is something I am not a huge fan of ~
If you make it through to the next Round.....hmmmm....is there a next Round?
....if you make it, I ask that you watch out for your Presentation as well.....middle-align also slows me down.....but......after a couple of reads, I find this enchanting and beloved talent at its' best ~
Good luck & God bless you,
Bear ~
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Lovely images to picture and nice flow.
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Beautiful and whimsical. Fantastic. Great poem. It has a very happy feel.
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Beautiful language usage! Delightful "Elfin chantress." Very nice "coaxed whimsy." Interesting contradiction with "dreary adventures."
Outstanding "breathless bumble,"
with the wing-whir not being attached to respiration. Shades of Peter Pan in "centuries of disbelief consume wonderland." NIcely worded "pixie hearts still chance."
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Thank you! It took me forever to think of something. I wanted to pick the prompt I thought no one else would. Then After I chose it I had a terrible time trying to come up with something. But I guess it worked out. Thanks for the sweet comment! Those are always helpful. I always wonder if anyone else will understand what I am writing about, LOL.
Thanks again!!
Hugs!
Cayla
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Lovely! I love the magical, mystical feel to this. Such a softness in your wording - beautiful wording!
Great border for this, too.
best wishes in the contest.
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Excellent!
Such a way with words, think the metaphors are wonderful. Moves me when I read it, so mystical, and real at the same time. Awesome job, and I see another win. Always a winner to me, and you rocked this girl.
-Daddio, aka poeticweaver~ x
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sorry
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I think that this is really a nice take on the prompt that you have chosen good luck in the contest best wishes always be well
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