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I Knew It

I can't say I'm taken aback
Just not sure how to react

Your words no longer excite
Providing immense amounts of insight

On the male species and its dependability
I fell for it again...silly me

Backstabbed with a smiling face
Leaving residual distaste

But hey, I should have seen it coming
Nothing to do but hit the ground running...

A contest entry

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  • sense surreal
    November 18, 2008

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    On the male species and its dependability
    I fell for it again...silly me

    I fell for it too
    I love the ending...goes well with the title

    now that ain't stupid of me


  • my02U
    November 9, 2008

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    hey, this is a cool write! my favorite lines were:

    Backstabbed with a smiling face
    Leaving residual distaste

    it's an interesting way to describe what happened i also enjoyed the last lines quite a bit - they really wrap up the poem. the only thing i would critique is that the first three rhymes are slightly forced. i find that rhyming poems are the hardest to write because it is so hard to have the right tone stay with the poem when you are limited by "hmmm, what rhymes with accelerate?" or whatever. This is a great poem, keep up the good work! i will figure out my finalists list once i read all of the poems.


    • i.s.i.s
      November 11, 2008
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      Thanks so much for the critique!! I really appreciate your comment!