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taking a stroll on romance road

 

Setting sun on ocean fronts,

I watch the owner of my heartbeat

smile and hold my hand.

 

Sailboats and slow-moving water,

dancing along with cool breezes,

this is how romance sees itself.

 

And quite honestly, I was mesmerized.

The scene was breathtaking and my darling,

she was ever so lovely.

[she was my midnight sonata]

 

O' night sky, carry your canvas over unto the morn'.

I want to cherish the memory and its melody.

So as the sunrise presents itself,

our sunset is still fresh

on my heart's surface.

 

 

Author notes

This is based off of a date me and my lovely girlfriend had.

Option - 3) Write about a thought you had recently or one that never left your brain. Tell me it with great detail.

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  • Zenda-Lokki gold member
    December 18, 2008

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    Wow!

    Fantastic poem written about a perfect moment between two people very much in love. Fantastic imagery, as I'm coming to expect from you lol. Congrats on the gold trophy, good luck.


  • Mistress Masquerade
    November 29, 2008

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    This is the best poem about love I have ever read. The date sounded like it was spectactular as well. Congrats on the well deserved gold!

  • PianoMan
    November 28, 2008

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    Wow. This sounds like it would have been a night that you wanted to last forever so you could be together in the peacefulness of the night. Great job and thanks for entering my contest!

  • piccola silver member
    November 25, 2008

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    beautiful. filled with evocative imagery that allows the reader to see a world as otherwise unseen. Great job here, I really enjoyed it. Sometimes I move poetry ahead because There is so much and I'm doing a process of illimination. Don't jump to any conclusions ...


  • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
    November 25, 2008

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    wow very nice poem here you did a awesome job and i see why it snatched a gold good luck to you in the contest

  • poets whisper silver member
    November 25, 2008

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    this is really beautiful. Looks like you've already garnered gold, congratulations. It is very romantic and the imagery is outstanding.


  • Re-invention silver member
    November 23, 2008

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    aww very nice! so sweet and lovable.. much enjoyed.. yes true love is pictured in many beautiful ways but this truly fits well


  • Ryno
    November 22, 2008
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    not feeling it
    ~prewrites, come and get them


  • voodoo ink Greeters member
    November 21, 2008

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    I love the imagery this gave off, and my favorite line was when you said, the owner of my heartbeat....what a beautiful way to describe the love of your life, and your midnight sonata...


  • Age of Rain
    November 21, 2008
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    lovely, soft, flowing imagery. keep writing.

  • meena krish
    November 19, 2008

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    A love poem that is sweet and sentimental. I like your style of writting. Enjoyed the read.
    Take care


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    November 19, 2008

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    Great work with this one my friend!
    It was a pleasure to read. Good luck to you
    and congrats to you on your gold here!




    Jeremy0826


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 19, 2008

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    Aww .. well that sounds like some great date!! This is very beautifully written!


  • The Poetic Bandits gold member
    November 16, 2008

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    Bandit Appreciation!

    Thank you for participating in this weeks reading list your activity is greatly appreciated!


    The Poetic Bandits


  • Polaja Greeters member
    November 15, 2008

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    This is a sweet poem - I really like the sentiment and the expression - the line where you use the word 'honestly' sums up this poem beautifully and I really like the simple joy that shines through your words - especially because you cased them so poetically amazing - and I wish you the best in the contest/s!

    Keep writing

    Polly


  • my02U
    November 15, 2008

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    I liked this poem a lot... the imagery was great and your feelings shine through every word. this is one of the best love poems i have ever read - it wasn't cheesy, it was heartfelt (no pun intended lol) i loved this keep up the good writes!

    luv,
    lovey


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    November 15, 2008

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    This is just so beautiful, my husband and I have moments like this but I wish I had captured them all as beautifully as you have. Best to you dear poet


  • Sandra R Reynolds gold member
    November 14, 2008
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    It is great. Your love has given you more to write.


  • ronnica
    November 14, 2008
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    Word lovely ,Emotion, romance, brought to light for a night too special and lovely to forget.


  • toomysterious
    November 12, 2008
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    Very romantic and peaceful. It seems a wonderful date to have.


  • Lady Altheia
    November 11, 2008

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    Wow this is soooooo romantic. I want to be there on the beach with someone special too. The sunset sounds beautiful. Good luck in your contests.


  • ZachP gold member
    November 11, 2008

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    a simple and beautiful picture of your date. Sounds magical

    Very well done, and thank you for sharing. Best of luck, fellow bandit


  • albinoblacksheep720
    November 11, 2008

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    Nice job. I saw a bit of images. I felt the wind. I can taste the salt water from sea. Very nice. Good luck.


  • Room without doors gold member
    November 11, 2008

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    Outstanding

    O' night sky, carry your canvas over unto the morn'.
    I want to cherish the memory and its melody.
    I loved this image it describes your emotions beautifully. I enjoyed reading this poem it has a lot of originality and I liked the way you developed the love theme. The imagery is well-chosen throughout and I liked the way you extended the idea of a sonata in the last stanza. Best of luck in the contest.


  • thepoetssoul
    November 10, 2008

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    You did some wonderful things with this penning.
    Love the imagery and soft words
    Splendidly done indeed.
    Best of wishes to you.

    Tony


  • NateNate
    November 10, 2008
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    this kidna sounds like a song to me its good.....


  • trekkergirl
    November 10, 2008
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    This is good. Thanks for sharing it with us.


  • LittleBee
    November 10, 2008

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    What dreams are made of!!!

    It is so wonderful to see the subtle changing of your writing since you met your darling girl!

    As always you write in such a sincere way that it evokes your own emotion in the reader. Your ink “glows” and through it I can tell that you are glowing as well.


  • xXxSeductiveLovexXx
    November 10, 2008

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    "I watch the owner of my heartbeat
    smile and hold my hand."

    That has to be the sweetest thing I've ever heard..
    This is an emotional poem that I don't think any woman can read dry eyed lol

    I love how you wrote this, how you never want the day to end because it was so wonderful and fresh on your mind.. or as you put it on your heart.

    So many people just walk past moments like these with their significant others and don't ever take time to appreciate what they have.. this truly reminds me of how much love really means.


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    November 10, 2008

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    this is absolutely beautiful.. I love this poem by you.. written from your heart and filled with love.. this is wonderful.. I love the last stanza the best especially the last two lines. she is one lucky woman..

    good luck
    kat


  • Rose Angel gold member
    November 10, 2008

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    Prelude...a beautiful write..you write as an artist, and composer...a romantic, and you paint beautiful pictures of the sea, and I love how you call her "your moonlight sonata" A pleasure to read...Bookmarked!

  • michaeline
    November 9, 2008

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    I love this.a loving tribute to someone.My favorite part was o'night sky,carry your canvas over unto the morn'.I want to cherish the memory and its melody.I do not think that you should revise this it is perfect the way that it is.


  • Sortingthroughlife
    November 9, 2008

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    This is so pretty. I love the line [She was my midnight sonata]
    This is an amazing poem. Simply amazing.


  • FindingMeInJesus
    November 9, 2008

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    Awww this is beautiful Chris. I'm sure she'll love this. Beautiful picture you paint with your words.

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