You seem to me a vivid dream
A touch of skin soft in a liqueur of madness
Transfused within my veins you stream
A transparent wave peels back another layer
Repenting as is scolds the hollow vacancy
Stretched on bare knees merciless indefinitely
An addiction fermented within my body
I’ll fight to resist such a longing yearn
Alas, oh souring virginity
As my lips begs and burns
From a deep swell of longing and need
Upon my thrusting paroxysm you’ll feed
Heated passion meet in midst of awe and cries
Collapsing in a blaze of eroding ties.
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Very Personal and sacredly special to my heart =)
... What more will the future expose?!
I'm not too sure. And i can't wait to find out.
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I agree with petalblue2, those two lines are my favorite as well!
"A transparent wave peels back another layer
Repenting as is scolds the hollow vacancy"
Hollow vacancy just stands out, it's a great usage of words.
And it rings!
Don't ever delete your works, Yotta. They're amazing with a cusp of excellence, even greater than the imagination withstands.
You have a certain element of surprise to your works, something that not many people can achieve, don't lose that, ever.
I miss you. Send me a text. I'm not able to reply to them, but you can send them.
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Wow! That is one amazing piece of imagery! Absolutely incredible the emotion that you express here! I love this Every line is a morsel of delight. My favorite,
A transparent wave peels back another layer
Repenting as is scolds the hollow vacancy
That is brilliant, creating the most lovely and tantalizing of images.
Truly lovely!
K~
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I smell alcohol... XD *so people don't think she's crazy, starts explaining*
...'liqueur of madness', 'fermented', 'souring'... sorry... XP i keep giving you random feed back...
This is very strongly worded! It HINTS at what's happening, but thanks again to the excellent wording, isnt crude like it could be. Well done. It does seem very personal, as youve mentioned, and that's what makes these type of pieces so beautiful. Its something you have to think about a little to find the different meanings in the lines. i really can't see anywhere to fix up...
okay...i lied...that yellow background is making my eyes see lemons, haha! =D
nice write!
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Beautiful, the inner soul as door between flesh and spirit swells an awakening that bleeds of spring and new birth a bridge between a longing dream and and the scent of love.
Another beautiful piece!
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This was very sweet, personal and beautiful it is obviously very special to you. I must say you did an astounding job with this and I really enjoyed reading it.
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