Lights blink,
It's too bright,
We sink,
Without a fight.
It hurts
thumping
hurting
too much red
Red, Ruby red.
Is - not - meant
-to - flash.
Not meant to be
angry.
Yet it angers people.
bang
green
bang
bang
green
Green, Emerald green.
Is - not - meant
- to - flash.
Not meant to be
jealous.
Yet it's jealous of trees.
The green that's got it all.
Everything will suffer, bang.
When there's blinking and sinking, bang.
Everything will suffer, bang.
When the lights are winking, bang.
Wink murder.
Die as animatedly as you can.
Play dead.
Be dead.
Forced
flashing
in a calm world
metallic
colours
metal
lights.
Madness is out of breath,
give it a rest.
Author notes
Just a mangle of ideas. I know - it really is a mangle. It's more of a base for other poems than anything.
What did you think
Comments
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Wow. wow. what an intense and emotion-filled write! it's really interesting because it does not follow a traditional poetic structure. it really is so wonderful, well done! keep penning wonders!
Summer Moon xx
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Colourful stuff!
Nice use of colour and imagery- really brings the poem alive.
This poem is a little long though. Perhaps think about trimming it down a little. It is always good to say what you want to say in as few words as possible.
You don't have to take this advice, it's just a suggestion.
Nice work though!
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